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THE SECRET YEAR Publication Day! Plus Finalists!

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Confetti!!! Streamers!!! Ticker tape!!!

Big congrats to Jennifer Hubbard as THE SECRET YEAR is now officially on sale at bookstores around the country!! Please be sure and pick up or order your copy as it is quite an amazing book, in case you haven’t heard.

And we have finalists for the THE SECRET YEAR Teen Diary Contest Extravaganza!

But first I thought I’d explain a bit about what went into my (ridiculously difficult) decisions.

Choosing the finalists was way more subjective than usual, even by contest standards, because there’s really no easy way to judge entries that varied so much – some seemed like excerpts from bigger stories, some seemed like they were meant to stand on their own, and there were so many different goals for what authors were hoping to achieve. It was also extremely difficult to judge these out of context: some may have been completely perfectly appropriate in the context of the story, but take them out and it’s harder to determine how well they may have fit into a larger narrative.

So please bear in mind that this was extremely difficult, and just because yours wasn’t chosen doesn’t mean it’s not fantastic.

The thing I love about Julia’s diary entries in THE SECRET YEAR is that they are completely in character. It’s not an epistolary novel, but they pop up at key moments in the narrative and hearing her voice is extremely powerful. Particularly since we know Julia is dead, it’s all the more compelling/poignant/tragic for Julia’s personality and voice to just leap off the page. There’s a vivid picture in the entries of a brash, forward girl, who also sometimes tries to stretch and use evocative words and images because she wants to be something more than what people think of her. So in choosing the finalists, I was drawn to ones that showed a unique, distinguishable voice, which was the most important factor in my decision.

I’d also like to be clear that I wasn’t actually going strictly for verisimilitude. It wasn’t a contest to sound most like a teen – it was a contest to write the most compelling entry. Just as with other first person narratives, I think the best entries give the illusion of a teen diary without actually making it sound completely literally what a teen diary reads like in real life (if you read my actual real life teen diaries you’d probably want to end yourself).

So if these end up sounding more eloquent than what most teen diaries would be like in real life: well, yeah!

Some random preferences/common themes/extra thoughts:

– There were a whole lot of teen rants, and I found that these were extremely difficult to pull off unless they were funny. There were quite a few that read, essentially, “This sucks! I hate this, I hate this so much let me tell you PRECISELY HOW MUCH I hate this, God have I mentioned I hate this?” Stretch this over 500 words and it’s extremely difficult to keep the reader engaged and to keep the character from being completely unlikeable, particularly out of context.

– There were also a ton of unrequited crushes, which, hey… I’m sure at least half of the ink produced in the history of the world has been spilled in teen diaries about unrequited crushes, but when reading many many entries in a row these ended up running together just a tad unless there was something unique.

– I found myself drawn more to ones that told a story rather than just providing scattered observations.

– There were lots of notes to selves, letters to dead people, and therapists/parents forcing kids to write a diary. Also pregnancy sticks.

– Some of the entries felt more like excerpts from a novel with a “Dear Diary” tacked on and didn’t provide enough of a sense that they were from a diary or unsent letter.

NOW THEN!!

The honorable mentions, who I’m afraid just missed the cut of finalists but who done quite good:

Holly Bodger
Melissa
AimeeLove
virg nelson
Liz Czukas
Kelly R. Morgan
Mira
Ryan @ 12:53
june

Good work!!!

Before I announce the finalists for real, please remember the voting rules:

In order to vote for the winner, please leave a vote in the comments section of this post. You will have until approximately 9-10 PM Pacific time TONIGHT to vote. Please not e-mail me your vote.

Anonymous comments are closed for the voting.

Also: No campaigning for yourself or for your favorites out there on the Internet. Let’s keep this fair. Please remind friends of this as well.

The grand prize winner will be announced tomorrow.

The five finalists are…………

Jamie B!

Dear Pop Pop,

There’s sand in Nana’s hair. It’s the last time I’ll see her like this, on the beach, collecting shells, her blue veins showing through her delicate skin.

She stumbles and Mom catches her arm. Both of them laugh as waves rush up their calves.

Her smile still looks the same as it did when she was younger in the photograph Mom has of the two of you on the mantle.

Remeber the time you let me cast your rod into the ocean, certain I’d tangle up the line and lose your bait? Remember how shocked we all were when I reeled in a flounder?

The Outer Banks aren’t the same without you.

Now she’ll be missing from the cottage too.

But, she’ll be with you again. I can still hear the two of you laughing and playing cards in the summer evenings out on the screened in porch. Ice tinkling in your High Ball glasses.

We’ve taken care of her for you, and it’s almost time for you to take over again.

She’s looking down at her hand and twisting her wedding ring that she’ll never remove.

She’s looking forward to being with you again.

I’ll see you someday, Pop Pop.

Love,
J

Jenny!

Thursday–

Things I love about Jake: 1. The way his hair curls at the nape of his neck when it gets too long. It reminds me of water skiing in the third grade when his parents and my parents would drag us to the lake and we’d tumble through the water–he’d toss his head and send droplets into my eyes. 2. The way he hunches down over his desk, like now, when he’s taking notes and I’m writing this, pretending to take notes. I wonder what he doodles in the margins? He’ll get up soon when the bell rings. He’ll uncurl like a cat and that’s the best part about watching him. 3. The way he remembers my name in the hallway and says “Hey, Amy” even when his arm is around Brina’s shoulders. People are surprised we know each other. Him: a boy with torn-knee jeans and rock and roll t-shirts. Me: laced up science wiz. 4. The way he guides Brina into a room with his hand at the small of her back. When I see that, I feel the cold space of skin beneath my shirt and know his hands would warm it. 5. All the bits I’ve collected of him: his Grateful Dead keychain, his iPod (with earbuds), his essay on the Civil War, his cologne. If I lean forward now I could smell it on the cotton of his t-shirt, but that’d be too strange. Better to watch his hair curl from here. The bell’s gonna ring and, like always, he’ll unfold himself, turn around to grab his backpack, which has fallen on the floor–he’ll nod, smile his half-smile that ignites the dimple beside the corner of his mouth, say “See ya, Amy” and walk out of Mr. Timberly’s class as if we didn’t share a secret.

Rowenna!

May 5, 1780
Full sun, unseasonably warm

I know it is an awfully uncharitable thing to think, but I cannot be in the room with Aunt Madeleine’s spoilt children for more than five minutes before I start to wonder if Swift’s Modest Proposal could be tested in our household. Perhaps this is why Mother protested so violently to Father allowing me to read modern writings, though I believe the primary reason to lie more solidly in her own inability to read any but the most elementary of compositions. Anyone knows that I am most conscientious to avoid prideful thought or uncharitable comparison, but I cannot escape the fact that my mother not only far less educated but less inclined to education than I. Regardless, I shall be escaping ever the more often to the library to escape Ophelia and Cornelius (are those not the silliest names you can imagine bestowing upon children?) as they will be with us for another fortnight.

Perhaps I am in a particularly foul mood on the subject of those children as it is on their account that I am being kept from the dinner party at the Greenes’ next Thursday evening. Mother thought it a delightful idea that I remain at home and watch the miniature terrors so that Madeleine could attend the party. I protested that my old nursemaid would be better suited to the task, but as she is now the plantation’s pastry cook Mother felt she would be kept too busy at her own tasks to properly manage the children, too. In addition, she felt it would be beneficial to my moral character and maternal instinct to watch them. Maternal instinct, indeed! As though one could feel maternal toward a pair of sticky-handed demons.

It is almost as though Mother knows that Betty Greene has been contriving to arrange dancing after dinner, and to provide her middle brother for my partner. Betty can think of no better amusement than match-making her brothers away to her dearest friends, hoping, I suppose, that she can eventually add us as sisters. It is not that I find Jerome Greene terribly appealing—he is too short, for one, and his red hair does not suit him—but it would be nice to dance for an evening like a proper adult. No, instead I am chained to a pair of prattling, screaming Lilliputians. It seems that everyone around me is permitted some acquiescence toward adulthood—my brother joining the Congressional forces of his own volition, Betty with her little dance parties. I must content myself with books, I suppose.

Tara!

Dear diary,

Oksana left today. Dad’s parting words were “Never believe a mail-order bride when she says I love you.” He was so chin-trembling, tear-stained-cheek sad watching her tear up our lawn that I wanted to cry just looking at him.

Oksana, on the other hand, was throwing her luggage around and cursing him in Russian. I wasn’t sure how safe it was for either of us standing by the living room window with so much glass around.

Dad always said she was different. I thought he was referring to the Belarusian catalog she came from, but his tears were genuine.

He whispered, “Sorry about the eggs.” This morning, Oksana accused him of deliberately making runny, undercooked eggs. It escalated to an accusation of salmonella poisoning. Finally, she revealed the real reason for the argument.

Dad and I both know that she keeps this house so clean you can eat out of the sink, drink from the toilet, and perform surgery on the kitchen table. And neither of us thanked her for it. I guess I stopped noticing what she did for us when I began expecting it.

Dad thinks she’ll come back. Every time she’s left us, she’s come home apologetic after the mall closed. I haven’t told him that this time is not like the previous ones. I saw her take the kitchen timer. Who takes a kitchen timer with them when they leave? People who move.

Just before she left, she paused in her ranting and looked at me. Her expression softened like she was going to cry too. Could it be that Oksana, the step-mom with the maternal instincts of a broom, was going to miss me? That’s when she waved good-bye to me slowly, three times with one hand, and got in the car.

As she backed out the driveway, I think I surprised her as much as she surprised me by mouthing the words “thank you.”

LJKuhnley!

Dear Future Losers of Brookview High,

The world looks a little brighter when your head’s suspended in a toilet. In between the water swirling around your ears and your silent thanks that nobody’s taken a piss in the bowl this morning, there’s a strange sort of calm that comes over you. Mouth closed. Eyes open. Water whooshing ‘round a porcelain sky. The hell of high school disappears and for a moment, you feel at peace. Because you know, that for those seven seconds, life can’t get any worse.

But then the jerk holding your feet lets you down and you’re gasping for breath and the world comes rushing back. You stare at the bowl, water dripping down your face, wishing you’d been flushed down the pipes and spit out in the James (or wherever piss-water goes). Because the moment your feet touch the ground, your seven seconds of peace are over.

If you’re a loser (and if you’re reading this I guess you are), the best advice I can give you is gain weight. Fast. Forget the dollar menu. Super-size those fries, scarf down all the quarter pounders you can swallow and keep right at it. Because an extra layer of fat is the only defense against the jerk-wads of the world.

Sure, you’ll get the lard-ass jokes. But, take it from me, if you can gain a few pounds-or thirty-do it. I’m cursed with an ultrafast metabolism my mother would kill for which means no matter how much lard I shovel down my throat, my bony ass doesn’t get an inch bigger.

I’ve been stuffed in lockers, trash cans and believe it or not- a tuba case. And that’s not even the worst of it. Did you hear the rumor about the geek who went dumpster diving for his retainer on mystery meat day? Yep, that was me. The total dweeb whose locker was plastered with pictures of the Jonas Brothers? Me again. The dork whose underwear got sent up the flagpole with him in it? You guessed it.

So let me tell you, if you’re as big a loser as I was, plunging head first in a toilet bowl might just be the highlight of your day.

Thanks again to everyone who entered, and congrats to the finalists!

UPDATE: Voting is closed! Winner will be announced tomorrow.

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  3. I am so glad my favorite made it to the list of finalists. There were tons of superb entries, but Jamie B's really tied me in knots. I loved this one. So, there's my vote.

    And yes, thanks, Nathan for another great contest!

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  7. my vote also goes to Jenny. Her's sounds the most like a journal or diary entry to me.

    Congrats to all the finalists- superb writing!

    And Nathan- I am AMAZED you were able to read through all of the entries in such a short amount of time. thanks for your hard work

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  11. These are all great. I'm so impressed, but since this is a vote and I have to pick a favorite, my fave is Jenny's entry.

    Ugh..so hard to pick! How did you do this?! I guess it gives me a little insight into how tough your job really is.

    Wonderful exercise!

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  13. My vote goes to Jenny, too — loved the description — but Jamie B.'s was a close second. Awesome entries all around! Thanks for such a great contest — it was fun. JEni

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  18. My vote is for Jenny's entry. It kept me reading, it was easy to visualize, I loved the voice and the final line mentioning a secret was perfect. Great work!

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  19. Oh, I love LJKuhnley (the entry, not the person… not that there's anything wrong with you LJKuhnley… I'm sure you're lovely… or handsome… or have a great personality)

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  21. I'll cast my vote for Jenny. I'm curious to know their secret.

    Also, to honorable mention AimeeLove… your entry brought tears to my eyes!

    Good job everyone, especially Nathan! That wasn't easy.

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  23. Wow.

    I'm sorry I didn't even read the rest of the post yet.

    I made the honorable mention list????????

    Do you have any idea how validating that is, Nathan? Well, you probably do. Did you really mean it, or are you just being nice because I threatened to jump off a bridge if I lost the contest. I mean, I meant it – I would have jumped off a bridge – but it would have been a very small bridge.

    For the rest of my life, when I'm doubting my writing, I'll think that I made honorable mention on your list – and I am being completely truthful about that – you have such good judgement.

    Thank you.

    Btw, my word count was 428, but honestly, I don't care that much. Maybe you counted all the little dashes. This is good enough. Truly.

    Um……I suppose that there is more going on here than just me. So, I'll go back and read the post, and cheer on the finalists.

    And congrats to you and Jenn! I hope the book is a total smash!

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  32. Oh so many fantastic entries! I was incredibly torn between Jenny and LJKuhnley's entries, but the last line about the secret sold me on it – my vote goes to Jenny!

    But they're all fantastic and I salute you Nathan for managing to get through so many words so fast, especially when it isn't actually part of your job!

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  34. These, of course, were all god but LJ Kuhnley sounded most like a teen diary to me. And as funny as it was the bit about getting fat and lard jokes being better than dweeb jokes-heartwrench!

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  45. My vote goes to Tara, with LJKuhnley close behind.

    I'm surprised Jamie B's made it, despite how beautiful it is. The diary author talks and makes references that would suggest she's at least in her 20s.

    How many teenagers can claim to have taken care of a sister who has a wedding ring around her finger? Am I just missing something?

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  48. Congratulations to all of the finalists! Based on your well-written entries, I would pick up a novel from each of you. That's what makes voting for one so difficult.

    My choice is Rowenna for such a clever entry. It was a reminder that teens in the 1700s were not all that different from teens today. Well done!

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  49. My vote is for Jenny. Her words sounds like some of my own diary entries in my teen years. She seemed to instill that yearning that is so poignant in the teen's life. The last line got me too.

    Good Luck to all the finalists! I loved reading the entries. Mira's earwig entry was fun to read, too.

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  51. My vote goes to Rowenna. So refreshing to read a diary entry from someone my senior.

    Congrats to all who entered, to all honorable mentions and to the finalists.

    Bransford, you are a glutton for punishment. How you do it is far beyond me.

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  58. Oh yes, and thank you for the contest! Your assignment helped me sort out a problem I was having with a novel I've been working on for a while. I wish I had more random opportunities to compel me to write outside the box! Thank you very much!

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  59. I vote for LJKuhnley.

    This entry tells so much about the character and how he sees the world, and that he has compassion for others going through similiar bullying. The author seems to have a firm grasp of a teenage boy's voice.

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  62. After much deliberation, I vote of Rowenna's piece — the historical setting presented additional challenges, and she's done it extremely well.

    All five are very good, it was difficult to choose just one.

    Thanks for the contest, Nathan.

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  63. Thanks for the contest. It was fun. All of the finalists were fantastic, but I think my vote goes to Jamie B. I loved her voice – it seemed genuine and grabbed my heart. Good luck!

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  65. Nathan: Whoops! Thanks for the clarification… I'm more used to seeing Nana as a name than a nick name.

    She still sounds like someone in her 20s to me, but it's a lot more open to interpretation if the person in question is her grandmother.

    So some people call their grandparents Pop Pop and Nana… I learn something new every day!

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  66. Thanks, Nathan. I just didn't want you to think I'd ignore your requirments. 🙂

    Thanks DG and annerallen!! Okay, no bridge jumping today. 🙂

    I'm too happy to vote. I'll have to come back and vote later.

    Btw, Nathan, you do know that now I'll be impossible to live with?

    'K. Enough about me. This is the finalists time to celebrate – I'm happy for all of you – congratulations!!! I'll vote later.

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  69. LJKuhnley.

    Written from a retrospective POV and still felt immediate. I also thought it was interesting that I had a vivid mental picture of what this kid looks like by the end even though he never describes himself. All we know about him is that he is skinny enough to fit in a tuba case.

    These were all great, congrats to the finalists!

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  70. Nathan, just wanted to say, thank you for keeping up with the shortlist. Gives a lot of us something to shoot for that's a little less intimidating.

    My vote goes to Tara.

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  73. Classic prompt! Thanks for taking us away from the misery of queries and proposals for a few moments. I'll mirror what Mira said. Any kind of validation helps. I always thought I was a tough guy with thick skin until I started writing–and sharing.

    My VOTE IS FOR JENNY because her entry has the best teenage-diary voice.

    Kuhnley's made me laugh really hard but it feels like an older guy writing in retrospect(which is what it is) instead of a teenager.

    Great stuff in the other finalists' entries but Jenny's subject matter is pure high school.

    Cheers to all on this wonderful blog.

    Ok(sigh). Turn Wifi off. Back to proposal….

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  77. For me, it was a close tie between LJKuhnley and Jenny. Wish I could vote for both. But I'm gonna pick one.

    Really I am.

    Now.

    Okay now.

    Seriously, this time I'm voting for sure.

    Ummmmm…

    Decisions. Decisions.

    Eeney Meeney Miney Moe, catcha…

    Oh nevermind.

    Jenny…

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  81. First, *OMG* – How cool to be an honorable mention!!! I double and triple checked the link just to make sure that it was really mine! Just be warned that I plan on printing this post out and putting it on my fridge. (Now, if I can only work this into a query letter…)

    Second, Wow! Awesome choices for HM and Finalists. There were so many other ones that I really enjoyed too.

    Third, Aside from a 5-way tie, LJKuhnley's entry is getting my since I can *totally* picture some students I know reading a whole story about that character.

    =)

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  86. Definately LJKuhnley. I felt like I was right there in that toilet . Loved the irony of how things can be so bad that you are relieved they can't get worse for just a moment. Great imagery and genuine voice.

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  92. Tara.

    It's the only one that made me feel anything, and also came off (to me) as the one most like something someone might actually write. Tough to pull those off together in my book.

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  103. I vote for Jamie B.

    Great job, everyone.

    Thanks, Nathan, for employing your superhuman reading ability and devoting your time and effort to this contest. You're a generous one alright.

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  105. It was so difficult to choose, really. I decided to choose the one that felt more like a journal or diary entry and it was a toss up between Jenny & Roweena. And its even more difficult to choose between them.

    I'm going to go with…

    Roweena
    I like her written voice.

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  106. The former high school nerd in me loves LJKuhnley. The former boy-obsessed high school nerd in me loves Jenny…

    But I just have to vote for LJKuhnley. You had me at "piss".

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  114. I can't vote, I can't choose just one – but the last three (Rowena, Tara, LJKuhnley) are all books I would gladly read, if they were books. LJKuhnley's had me cracking up, though, so if I HAD to choose one, I'd go for that one.

    But all five of these are lovely! It's just that when faced with five amazing ice cream choices, you have to break the tie with something unrelated (such as whether the name of the flavor makes you laugh) rather than the merits of each individual scoop. Uh, yeah.

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  119. Tara has my vote.

    But it was a tough choice. They were all first-rate.

    Congratulations to the finalists and HM's!

    And Congratulations on the pub of "The Secret Year!" That book sounds really good to me and I'm not even a YA.

    Hey, two great excuses to break out the champagne.

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  121. Jamie B!

    As a high school English teacher, I am well aware that teenagers are capable of such mature, poignant observations. This one made me cry.

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  122. Wow! I'm so excited! Thanks to everyone who has voted so far! As much as I'd like to vote for myself, I feel it wouldn't be sporting…so I vote for LJKuhnley! Have I used enough exclamation points!!?

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  131. Tara, that broom line should be written on a plaque somewhere.

    (I'm glad to have been beaten by these guys, they're entries were amazing. And I figured mine was far too sappy from the get-go.)

    Hope you have another contest soon, this was fun.

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  132. Thanks for a great contest Nathan !!

    And looking forward to the arrival of my pre-ordered copy of TSY…

    Congratulations to all the finalists and HM's they were all great entries…

    My vote is for Jamie B !! 😀

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  137. Mira,

    Congratulations! I'm so happy for you! I know how long you've wanted to win one of Nathan's contests. I've long since given up on winning one, but it's wonderful to see you persevere and succeed. You go, girl!

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  138. These were AWESOME. I had a very hard time choosing between the last 3 finalists, but ultimately I want to read more about LJKuhnley's narrator than anyone else.

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  143. Congratulations to Jenn on today's release of THE SECRET YEAR! I've posted an interview with her on my blog: http://wp.me/phaYw-ul

    The contest was genius, Nathan. Kudos to all the finalists. My vote goes to Jamie B but Tara's and LJKuhnley's entries also appeal. 🙂

    Carol Garvin

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  144. Jenny gets my vote! I thought hers was the most true to a diary entry. I also liked Melissa's the best out of the honorable mentions.

    I also want to mention that I really thought the one by Hannah on the first page of comments was a contender. (The one signed Grace.) Also on that first page, I really liked the one by EB. BUT I confess to only reading the first couple of pages!! 🙂 I never had time to read them all.

    Congrats to all and good luck finalists!

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  145. Although I thought they were terrific – my vote is for Jamie B. Hers connected with me on a very deep level – brought me right back to being sixteen and that first real experience with the pending loss of someone you love.

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  146. Well done to everyone who entered and I read them all! 🙂
    Nathan, I think you a great job doing more than picking winners with a piece of random-number generating software!

    MY VOTE – to JENNY

    But, considering the heart-stopping-panics I had over spiders and daddy-long-legses when I was a teen, I think you can guess where my vote would have registered!

    Also, Ryan – I loved it.

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  147. My jaw dropped when I found my name on the Honorable Mention list.

    Thanks for the opportunity, Nathan!

    My vote is for Jenny. Her entry is everything I love about YA: quirky, funny, honest and deeply human.

    All the finalists did a fabulous job.

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  152. I vote for Jamie B. What a beautiful piece of writing. It's short but so powerful.

    Jenny comes a close second. I love the dimples igniting line.

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  155. Congrats to all the finalists and runner ups. I still can't believe you read through all of those entries Nathan. That's definitely dedication.

    Anyways, my vote goes for Jenny's entry. I had read through a good amount the night I submitted mine and hers stuck out to me even then.

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  156. Nathan – I can't believe you read all of those. Gold star for you in the New Year.

    I enjoyed all the entries.

    My vote goes to TARA! – reminded me a bit of Vickie Christina Barcelona for some reason.

    Good work all.

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  157. LJKuhnley gets my vote!

    All five are strong in their own ways and I enjoyed them all. I think this looks like its going to be close!

    Well done everyone, I really enjoyed some of these – AND THANK YOU – you help me see what's good about your writing that I need to strengthen in my own too. A contest with a benefit for everyone! Thanks for running it Nathan, an almighty task.

    Jen P

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  158. There are so many girls here. Sometimes makes me feel like I am the only guy who reads. Post after post its women. I want to vote, but will my vote make a difference against the female majority. The winner will definitely be a female favorite.

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  165. LJKuhnley gets my vote. That entry was perfect in every way.

    Reading the finalists submissions, I kept thinking, "Wow. These are all fanstastic. How will I choose a winner?" But when I got to LJKuhnley's, there was no question.

    Congrats to all of the finalists. Brilliant entries from all of you.

    :)Ash

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  167. Nathan,
    I am astounded you got through those so quickly. We appreciate your hard work and your positive attitude. Thanks again for your encouraging, meaningful blog. My day would be incomplete without it.

    Congrats to all the finalists and honorable mentions!

    My vote: LJKuhnley

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  171. Don't know if I'm in time: don't quite get this Pacific time stuff. However – it has to be Jenny. That is absolutely how if felt like to be a besotted teen, but she's made it more intriguing with the secret thing. Great writing – well done.

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  172. I cant even pick from 5 ! I am guessing you read some each day and not in one sitting, then kept notes. And now here you are reading posts and commenting !

    I read, write like a teen, and tried to hard. Wish I know about the verisimilitude, maybe would have tried to be eloquent instead.

    hmmmmm, Ok, um, Rowenna, and LJK right behind

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  178. If you don't vote for yourself, why should anyone else? So – I vote me. Jamie B. 🙂

    Although, I did have a tough time deciding – wow, great competition – congrats to all the others!!

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  182. LOL, yeah I was definitely one of those "unrequited crushes" entries. 😛

    Anyway, it's hard for me to choose but I think I'm gonna vote for LJ's entry. Something about the way they described having their head shoved in a toilet…I don't know, it just resonated.

    Congrats to all the finalists and semi-finalists!

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  186. Okay, I'm actually going to vote this time…

    Rowenna, with Tara a very close second.

    I agree with whoever said that Rowenna managed to accomplish something tricky, a teen voice using believable period language.

    And Tara's for the specificity of some of the images/events. The kitchen timer!

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  200. LJKuhnley! I loved that one.

    But all of them are great, as many others have said.

    And Mira, you made me smile. I think it's because what you wrote is exactly how I would have felt if I had gotten an h.m. 🙂 I guess it always feels good (validating) to have someone else put your own feelings (or what would have been your feelings) into words.

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  207. LJKuhnley! Hilarious!

    (Random question)

    BTW, how many people do you think actually read the reasons for your decisions, etc. instead of just skipping ahead to see who you picked?

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  208. Nathan,
    I already voted, but I wanted to let you know that your contest really helped me out last night. I had to do a colonoscopy prep, which, if you don't know, is a fabulous experience involving multiple cups of a solution of what tastes like ocean water mixed with rotten Tang – anyway, guess what I did while I chugged? Yep. There were so many great entries, and reading them took my mind off the ocean water /tang, as well as the, shall we say, explosive aftermath, the details of which I'll spare you here. See? You help people in all kinds of ways that you don't even know about.

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  210. I vote for Jenny.

    And if she doesn't write it as a book; she's going to have to e-mail me and tell me what the secret is, what happens and when we get rid of that dang girlfriend.

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  218. I vote for Jenny. I love the last sentence. Pure brilliance. When I got there, I wanted to know what that darned secret was.

    To be fair, here's something I liked for all of them:

    Jamie B: The first sentence.
    Jenny: Almost everything, but especially the last sentence.
    Rowenna: The vocab.
    Tara: The second paragraph.
    LJKuhnley: The toilet bowl thing. Priceless. Plus, the "Dear Future Losers of Brookview High."

    Will you ever have another contest with similar prizes? (Yes, I've asked you this before. I guess I'm just dying to know.)

    -Madeleine

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  220. Gosh I feel it is a tough one between LJKuhnley and Jennifer! I've never been bullied but LJ's post sure makes ya think about it! Then Jennifer has a way of making you fall in love all over again and HECK we don't even know this guy! So since we can only vote for one of them MY VOTE IS FOR…LJKuhnley. Oh, and congrats to those who did so well!

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  221. It is almost impossible to choose between Jenny and LJKuhlney, but I'll cast my vote for Jenny. I was so enthralled while I was reading it at work, I didn't notice my boss standing over my shoulder. Reading. Intently.

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  222. From my teen aged daughter re: two finalists:

    They were okay. They both seemed rather forced though. Like they were written by old people. Good ideas, but the style is just so so. Maybe it was the word limit.

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  226. I vote for Tara. Her entry drew me in the most and the ending left me itching for more – the classic sign of a good story.

    Some of the others had a more authentic diary feel, but that also made them more difficult to read, as they lost my attention fairly easily.

    All of them had a very authentic YA feel, which I congratulate them all on. I guess my genre will always be adult fiction, even if my characters are not! 🙂

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  236. Rowenna
    She's the only one with a propper diary entry. The others are just to big scale. Great diary entries are about little things that feel big to the writer. Big events are lazy writing. IMHO

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  239. I don't think my comment posted, but here it goes again. My vote goes to Jenny's, which I really liked. Plus the last line sealed the deal for me, as I think it did for many others.

    Congrats to all the finalists, by the way!

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  240. My vote's for Rowena. I just love that one. 😀 They're all good, but it took me back to reading Pride and Prejudice and those books that I just adore, and I just loved it. 🙂

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  242. I vote for Jamie B!

    Absolutely loved her entry.

    Jenny was a close second. Am I the only one who almost fell of her chair when reading the last line.

    Great contest!

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  243. It is a difficult choice but if you could choose five from– was it 685?– I can choose 1 from 5.

    I vote for Rowenna. Love the reference to Swift's Solution.

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  244. Dang–these were fantastic! SO hard to choose just among the finalists.

    My vote is for Tara! Although, the last entry was an extremely close runner up, and I now want to read the book (if there is one.)

    Great job, finalists!

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  254. I really loved the detail that established character in both Jenny's and Tara's entries. Having to choose just one, I'll say Tara for a fresh concept.

    And, Nathan, I am awed that you hold these fantastic contests. I'm speculating that you've cloned yourself so you can divvy up the work.

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  258. All the finalists are well= written and unique. I vote for JKuhnley because her entry reminded me of the subject matter a teen would write about. Plus, I liked the humor.

    Jenny & Tara's entries were close seconds.

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  261. Great contest! Can't believe you were able to get through all of the entries, Natha…wow.

    It was tough (all finalists were great) but I kept coming back to Jenny's entry. Something about it stuck with me.

    Good luck everyone!

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  263. Nathan, you rock!

    I vote for LJKuhnley!

    I loved all the finalists though and laughed out loud at some of the others, particularly Holly Bodger and Liz Czuka's posts.

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  265. What an enjoyable contest!! I can hardly wait for the next one!

    It was very difficult to choose, but I think I'll go with Tara!
    I really enjoyed the simplicity of the entry and yet I felt I was already immersed in the story.

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  271. Wow…this is unexpected! Congrats to the finalists and runners-up–really fabulous work. I fully intended to pop into the comments to vote for one of the other finalists but I'm finding that I can't pick–Jamie's was so evocative, Jenny pulled me into the story so deftly, Tara's use of detail was just lovely, and LJ made me laugh out loud.

    Thanks for this contest, Nathan!

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  278. These are sincerely impressive entries. I thought they were all extremely well-written. In fact, I'd choose any of them. It was a ridiculously difficult decision.

    I thought Jaime's was heartbreakingly and beautiful, Jenny really captured the erotic yearning of a crush, and Tara's was original, intriguing and suprising.

    Rowena's was beautifully done – subtle and captured the period voice.

    But LJ is a style close to my heart. When I read it, I thought I couldn't have written this voice, but I wish I could. That's my vote, definitely!

    And thanks to those people who said they liked my earwig. It meant alot!

    Marilyn, thank you for your support – I felt sad though when you said you'd given up. I hope you'll reconsider. I like your writing alot.

    I thought all the HM were terrific too!

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  285. LJKuhnley!

    Thanks for another challenging contest, Nathan. How many hours are there in your day? How do you get it all done??

    I'm bummed because my B&N (NYC) didn't have The Secret Year in stock today. I'll try again tomorrow.

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