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Agent for a Day,
I would like to present P.O.V., a 97,000 word thriller.
Audra doesn’t see the world like other people; she prefers to view it through the one by two inch square of her camera’s view-finder. At an estate sale, Audra finds a rare old camera and a box full of photos of the man who owned it. There’s one photo for every year of his life arranged like a travel journal, only the wheelchair bound invalid never left his home. Fixated on the mystery behind the journal, she has the camera repaired, and following the previous owner’s instructions, she takes a picture of herself and sends it off to Nepal – a place she always wanted to see. A week later, her dreams are full of Mt. Everest and brightly colored prayer chains strung above a rustic village.
No matter where she sends herself, she sees through the eyes on film. Places she’s never been. People she doesn’t know. Rooms she’s never occupied. When she starts a webpage to chronicle her virtual travels, Audra discovers that she can see through open windows on computer screens and off printed pages. It’s funny when she catches the professor she always hated in a compromising situation, but terrifying when her dreams fill with images of a murder she’s forced to watch and can’t stop. Audra can’t even seek help from the Police without sounding insane.
When her tormentor realizes what’s happening, he makes Audra his ultimate victim. Once he finds her, it’s easy to find her friends. Now he’s got a captive audience that must observe powerless and mute while he carries out his twisted machinations.
I can send sample chapters or a full manuscript upon request. Thank you for your time, I look forward to hearing from you.
Sincerely,
Author
STATS: 27% request rate
PCB says
Dear Author,
Your query piqued my interest. Please send me the first fifty pages of your manuscript.
Many thanks,
PCB
donnas says
Thank you for your submission. Please send me the sample chapter for further consideration.
Hilabeans says
Dear Author,
Thank you for giving me the opportunity to consider your work. I regret to say that I don’t feel that I’m the most appropriate agent for this project.
Best wishes,
HHS
Saint_Fool says
Dear Author,
After reading your query, I would like to request that you e-mail me the first 30 pages of P.O.V.
My usual response time is three to four weeks.
Thank you,
Saint Fool
Dawn says
Thank you for contacting Dawn Ink.
I’m interested in seeing P.O.V. in full.
Sincerely,
Dawn
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I love this premise and think I could really get behind this book.
Kathy says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. I’m interested in reading more.
Please send the first 3 chapters.
Sincerely,
Kathy
SuzieQ Agent4U says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I do not feel your book is right for me. Good luck with your search.
Best,
S
Note: I was on the fence for this one. Sounds like an interesting premise.
2readornot says
Although this is an intriguing premise, I found it too hard to suspend my disbelief. Good luck!
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
Thank you for taking the time to submit your query to me.
I found your premise an interesting one
At this moment in time, however, I choose to pass on your project. This does not automatically mean your query is not good enough. It simply means that I am not the right agent for this project. This can be for a number of reasons.
If you would like to know why, you can send a reply to this mail. Please change the subject line to: FEEDBACK / P.O.V. / YOUR NAME. I will respond to your request within two weeks.
Good luck with finding representation and keep on writing!
Kind regards,
Nicole34
Libby Martin says
Dear Author,
Thank you for submitting your query. Although your premise is interesting, I cannot take on any projects at this time.
All the best,
Libby
AgentforDay says
Dear Author,
Thank you for submitting P.O.V for my consideration.
I am really intrigued by the premise; however, the query needs a little work.
Please rework the query and resubmit. Also, remember to include the first five pages of the manuscript in the body of the email.
Sincerely,
Agent for the Day
GuyStewart/DISCOVERCHURCH says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Notes like this are the hardest for me to write because while you came close, I can ultimately only represent those manuscripts I feel passionately about. Thank you for thinking of me. Good luck in placing this elsewhere.
Sincerely, Guy Stewart
Enusan says
Thank you for your query. You initial premise is certainly interesting, but I like many other play-agents felt dissatisfied with how the plot seems to have developed. The plot skirts too closely to silly to me, so I’ll have to pass.
That Girl says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I will have to pass at this time.
Best of luck,
That Agent Girl
R. Markiam says
Dear Author,
I am glad you sent your query for P.O.V. to me and look forward to working with you further. Please send the complete manuscript for my review.
Regards,
R. Markiam
Anonymous says
Thank you for your submission. Unfortunately, this project is not a good fit for me. I appreciate your time and consideration, and wish you luck in finding representation.
Best,
Agent M
Gwen says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your interest. Unfortunately, this project is not a good fit for me at the present time.
Regards,
Gwen
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(Side note: if I already responded to this one, you have my apologies – but after long, hard consideration, I had to decline this one. There is a great idea there that really intrigues me, but unfortunately the query is too convoluted. I cannot get a clear idea of what precisely this novel is about, aside from the magic camera.)
ludwig snarf says
i regret that we cannot help you
Jenn S. says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. It’s not right for me, but please keep me in mind for future submissions.
Regards,
Jenn S.
(Reason: Just…too confusing. I started off intrigued, but I was disoriented by the end. Is this a paranormal thriller?)
MonkBoy says
Thank you for your query submission, but I’m afraid we’re not interested in your material at this time.
Best of luck,
Placebo Publications
Linta says
Dear Author
Thank you for your submission. Unfortunately, this story is not for me.
Best wishes
Agent
[interesting premise, but the query focuses too much on premise and not enough on the key conflicts.]
Livia says
Thank you for your query, but it is not a good fit for me. Best wishes.
Livia
Laura Martone says
Dear Author:
Thank you for submitting your query for consideration. I appreciate the time, energy, and passion that it required to complete “P.O.V.”
Unfortunately, given the thousands of queries that I receive annually, I can only request a small percentage of manuscripts for possible representation. While I find the subject matter of your novel intriguing, it does not meet my editorial needs at this time.
I am grateful for the opportunity to consider your work and wish you much luck in your future endeavors.
Sincerely,
Laura Martone
chris says
Thank you for your query, but your project isn’t right for us at this time. Best of luck in your endeavors.
Sara J. Henry says
Form rejectionNOTE: I’ll swear I’ve rejected this one twice already, but it doesn’t seem to be posting.