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Dear Agent for a Day,
I have followed your blog for several months and appreciate that your posts are educational, with many dashes of humor and candid honesty. I have noted that you enjoy young adult fiction, and I hope to interest you in representing my novel.
Eighteen-year-old Kellen is a Crowmaker, lifted from a bleak existence and turned via magical experimentation into a hero--a law keeper for the expanding Tenvan colonies. When the Crowmakers' greatest weapons begin to fail and Kellen's best friend and fellow Crowmaker is killed as a result, Kellen sets out to bring to justice the man she holds responsible, the engineer whose flawed plans and rushed experiments caused the failure. What Kellen finds instead is a dead man, a town under siege from a sentient force of nature with links to her personal plight, and the need to save the life of her enemy's daughter in order to save her own.
CROWMAKER is a 76,000 word young adult fantasy novel which follows Kellen's journey through despair and the desire for revenge and along the path to becoming something greater than a made hero--her own person. It is a completed work and available upon your request.
I am also the author of several short stories which have appeared in THE LEADING EDGE (April 2003) and CRICKET MAGAZINE (Dec. 2005), as well as other publications.
Thank you for your time. I look forward to hearing from you.
Sincerely,
Author
STATS: 13% request rate
Monday, April 13, 2009
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Sorry.
Thanks.
Lucy A muse ision
fictitious agent
(Note: well it is true that the early bird gets the worm, isn't it? Probably pays to try to time the query with opportune timing whenever possible.)
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission, but this is not for me. I wish you luck in finding a home for your manuscript.
All the best,
Barb
Dear Author,
This is one of those letters I loathe to write as an agent, because you have a great hook.
Subjectively, however, the material in THE CROWMAKER is not something I feel I could zealously represent as it would deserve.
I have no doubt, however, that you will be snatched up quickly, and I truly do wish you the best of luck.
Sincerely,
Agent X
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query, but this isn't right for me.
Best,
hannah
Thank you so much for your submission. Unfortunately, I don't feel I'm the right agent to represent your work.
Good luck and keep writing!
Thank you for your submission, but I do not think this project is right us. This is a subjective business and other agencies will feel differently. We wish you every success with your project.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. I regret to inform you that I am going to have to pass on this, but please keep me in mind for your future projects.
Best of luck,
Kitti
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. I am intrigued by Crowmaker and would be interested in a partial. Please send me the first 50 pages and a cover letter.
Thank you,
The Wickerman
Nathan Bransford's Guinea Pig
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. I'm afraid this project isn't right for me. I wish you luck in your search for representation.
Regards,
Suki
Reasoning: Just not hooked. Not enough detail to make this feel fresh IMO. Could also be end of a long day and the wow factor just isn't there. Good luck.
Dear Author,
Every submission is important to us. Unfortunately, we are no longer accepting new clients. We wish you the best of luck in finding an agent to represent your work.
Yours,
The Diva Agent
Dear Author,
Not for me, sorry!
Thanks!
We don't handle YA fiction. Best of luck.
AgentMan
Dear Author:
What's a Crowmaker? I would have liked a brief definition or to hear nothing at all about them.
Other than that, nothing about your query makes my feel especially snarky; it's just too similar to other works in the fantasy genre.
Pass.
Mr. Snark
Dear Author,
Thank you, but this project is not for me.
Agent99
Comments: Not enough sense of character, voice.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. Your premise sounds interesting and well-developed. Although I'm confident that your search for an agent will be fruitful, I don't think I'm the best person to represent your work.
Good luck and yours truly,
AftD
Dear author,
Thank you for your query but I have to say no at this time. Good luck in finding representation.
Dear Author,
I'm afraid that at this time I am unable to offer representation for your novel. This is purely a business decision, and unfortunately means that I must turn away many talented individuals. I encourage you to continue querying agents you think might be interested.
I appreciate your interest in Agent for A Day, and wish you every success in your writing career.
Regards,
Cassandra
Dear Author,
Please send the manuscript via email. I enjoyed your voice throughout the query, and look forward to reading it.
Agent XXX
(Five, that's my limit)
**This was about as polished a query as you can get. I really liked the conflicts, and the query was to the point.
Dear Author,
I think if I knew more about these Crowmakers I might be hooked. The story does sound weird enough to be my kind of thing, but I just need a little more to go on.
Thanks anyway.
Signed,
PPP
Bingo! Send me a full. Sookie, likey.
Dear Author:
Thank you for your query. Please e-mail the first 50 pages of your manuscript CROWMAKER to casey@agentforaday.com for further consideration.
Best,
Casey
Too bad Sooki can't spell her own name. Send me a full, anyway. Pretty please.
Sorry, but I must pass. I didn't get a good feel for how this story differs from others in the same genre, and the description of the plot is a bit vague. Best of luck.
Thank you for submitting your query. Unfortunately, it is not what I’m looking for at this time. However, do continue to query widely. After all, it does only take one agent to say yes!
All the best,
Agent for the day
Dear Author,
Thank you for your interest in The Only Literary Agency Insane Enough To Trust Me With Queries. Unfortunately, I'm going to have to pass.
Best of luck,
Merry
As a side note, the query was fine - it just didn't sound like a story I'd like personally. I'd say this would be a rejection because it didn't hit the right desk, not because there was anything wrong with the query.
word verification - readjabs - well, that about sums up query hell, doesn't it?
Sorry, I'm not interested. Best of luck.
Dear Author, thanks for your query. Unfortunately, it's not right for my list, best of luck, etc.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. I'm afraid I'm not passionate enough about your premise to request more at this time. Another agent may feel differently, and I wish you the best in your search.
Selestial
I had to keep re-reading the blurb. I'm not sure what it was exactly, but I couldn't see the connection between what happened and why she would have to save her enemy's daughter to save her own life. It was a jump of logic my brain just couldn't make at this point.
Dear Author,
Thank you so much for submitting your work and considering me to represent it. While the story sounds quite interesting, I am afraid it does not fit my list at this point in time and I must regretfully pass. I know rejections can be hard to take, but please keep submitting and following your dream.
Best of luck in your agent hunt!
Sincerely,
Madison
Reason for rejection: Did not leap off the page.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query, but it's not for me.
Good luck!
Heather
Dear Author,
I have maxed out on manuscript requests for today, so I must pass on this one.
Agent For A Day.
Requested #10, #12, #17, #20, #39.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I will have to pass at this time.
Best,
Meg Spencer
I'm not the right agent for this type of fantasy.
Keep querying and best of luck to you.
Thank you for your query. While fantasy does not always interest me, I think there is a market for stories like this one, so I'd like to see how you handle your premise. Please send me the first three chapters, and I'll get back to you as soon as I can.
Best,
a new agent with an open mind
Dear Author:
Thank you for your submission, but this project doesn't sound right for me.
Sincerely,
David
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission, unfortunately I will have to pass on it. The story line is interesting, however the structure of your query letter made me think that your manuscript probably needs a bit more polishing.
Best wishes,
Sharon
Thank you for querying me, but I'm afraid I'm passing on your story. Best of luck in your continued writing endeavors.
(reason: there's some decent possibilities here, but I don't get a very strong sense of the story from the query. I also wanted to know what a Crowmaker was within the query, not left as something to intrigue me to read more.)
[form rejection]
Dear Author,
Thank you for your recent query; discovering new talent is one of the joys of being a literary agent, and I am always honoured to have the opportunity to read a writer's best work.
Please accept my regrets, however, as I won't be offering to represent this novel. I apologize for informing you of this using a form letter, but the volume of mail I receive makes it impractical for me to give personalized rejections.
I wish you the very best luck in finding a literary agent whose enthusiasm will bring your book the success it deserves!
Sincerely,
J. J. DeGoblin
~~~~~~~
For your reference, here are the most common reasons why I decline certain queries. Please note that if your submission was very good, my reasons for rejecting it were probably much subtler than the items on this list and cannot be put quickly into words. Again, I apologize for this form letter, but I cannot invest the time to critique those submissions I have chosen to not represent. Thank you for your understanding.
Most common reasons why I decline manuscripts:[ ]--The manuscript is in a genre which I don't represent
[ ]--The query appears to be a non-personalized mass mailing
[ ]--The query/manuscript's presentation was worryingly unpolished
(E.g. Many spelling, grammar, punctuation or homophone errors; a non-standard format)
[ ]--The writing doesn't seem polished enough
(This improves with practice; your next novel may be excellent)
[ X ]--The plot doesn't sound compelling enough
(Again, this improves with practice and self-education)
[ ]--The plot sounds too similar to something book-buyers have already seen
Comments, if any:You may have a very good story here, but your query is a bit vague about the plot and I worry your book might not be different enough from others on the market to be easily sold.
Dear Author,
Thank you for submitting your query. Unfortunately, I am not able to offer you representation at this time. Best of luck,
Agent KES
Thank you for your query. I'm afraid this isn't right for me.
Best,
Brian
Dear Author,
Thank you for letting me review your query. Unfortunately, I don't think this is a good fit for me at this time.
Best of luck!
JJ
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission, but I am not the right agent for this book. Best of luck!
Robin
Dear Author,
thank you for your query, I regret to inform you that I cannot represent you.
-Lea
Dear Author,
Thank you for your interest. Unfortunately, this project is not a good fit for me at the present time.
Regards,
Gwen
Dear Author,
Unfortunately, I am unable to offer you representation at this time. Thank you for submitting your work for consideration. Please keep me in mind for future projects.
Kindest Regards,
D. Agent
Thank you for your consideration, but this isn't right for me at this time.
Best of luck, Craven
Dear Author,
I have not read all of Nathan's rules, but I want to encourage you by saying that I might have passed as well BUT, I think it's simply a problem with the query. Your story is probably great - you just might need a more original approach to the actual query.
My favorite line in the query was "becoming something greater than a made hero - her own person."
Oh! And I would put your first paragraph, last. In other words, start with the story.
Good Luck!
Katie
I would love to see a full!!!
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. Unfortunately it's not what I'm looking for. Best of luck in your search for representation, and keep writing!
Sincerely,
Agent X
Dear Author,
Sorry, not for me.
Best of Luck,
Agent Name
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query, however I will have to pass.
All the best,
Cindy
Dear Author,
Thank you for submitting your query to the Most Awesome Literary Agency Ever. I regret that, at this time, your project is not quite what I’m looking for. I wish you the best of luck in your continuing search for representation.
Sincerely,
Jen C.
Author,
Thank you for submitting your query. Unfortunately, it is not right for me at this time. Good luck in your search for representation.
Agent Erin
******
side note: I finally finished reading all the queries! Now I'm back to pick 5 requests out of the dozen I want to say yes to! (Nathan, this is one tough job)
The query seemed vague. I couldn't tell what this was really about.
Sorry, not for me.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, your book isn't right for me. Agenting is subjective, though, and I wish you the best of luck!
Sincerely,
Megan
Dear author,
Thank you for the submission, Crowmaker. Unfortunately, it is not quite right for me. I wish you good fortune in your search for an agent.
Sincerely,
K. Andrew Smith
Thank you for your query, unfortunately it's not right for me.
Best,
Bridge
On a personal note, this didn't convey the excitement that is probably in your book. I didn't get a sense of voice or character as it seemed like you were trying to fit in as much as possible into the query. It isn't necessary to give every detail or plot element, stick to the main one, make it exciting and shoot for the stars:)
Hope this helps
Bridge
Dear Author:
Thank you for sending the query for CROWMAKER. The plot and the main character sound promising. I would love to read first 30 pages of your manuscript. Please send them as a Microsoft Word attachment in a reply to this e-mail.
Sincerely,
Agent Olga.
Dear Author:
Your premise is interesting, but we are not currently accepting new clients. Thank you for your submission.
Best of luck,
Agent Caroline
No thank you. Best of luck in your endeavors.
-Agent Pro Tempore
Dear Author,
Thank you for taking the time to submit.
I regret to inform you that at this time I would like to pass on your book.
Best of luck in the future,
Regards,
Agent for a Day, Bookworm Megs
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query, but this isn't right for me at this time.
Best of luck,
Agent for a Day
Thank you for your query. I don't feel this is right for me but I wish you the best of luck.
Sincerely,
Kristi
Dear Crowmaker,
Thank you for your query. Your story sounds interesting and I would love to see a partial.
Please email the partial to me as soon as possible.
Sincerely,
BK
Dear Author,
Thank you for your interest in The Authors Write Literary Agency. I have reviewed your query for CROWMAKER, and I’m sorry to say that I do not feel that I am the best agent to represent your work at this time.
Please keep in mind that there are many talented agents out there, and opinions are subjective based on individual preferences, workload, and market climate.
Don’t be afraid to research other agents and query those that you feel are best suited to represent your work. Best of luck!
Regards,
Daley Agent for a Day
Thank you for querying me. Unfortunately I am going to have to pass at this time.
I wish you the best of luck with another agent.
Sincerely,
Agent
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query, however, I do not feel excited enough about it to request anything further.
Good luck in your search for an agent.
Quixotic
Dear Author,
Thank you for querying me. Unfortunately, I don't think I'm the right agent to represent your work.
Best,
Agent
Dear Author:
Many thanks for your query. Unfortunately, I am not the right agent for this project.
With all best wishes,
Onovello
Dear Author
Thank you for your query. Sorry, but it is not for me.
Sincerely,
Agent for the Day
Thank you for contacting us about your proposed fantasy novel. Unfortunately, we are not currently accepting manuscripts in this genre. We wish you all the best with your publishing endeavors.
Best regards, Leslie
Dear Author,
Thank you so much for submitting your work to me. Unfortunately, Crowmaker is not a good fit for me at this time. I wish you much luck in your writing endeavors.
Agent-for-a-day
Form rejection
Form rejection.
Dear Author:
Thank you for your interest in my agency. Unfortunately, I do not feel I am the right agent for you at this time. Best wishes as you continue your search.
Sincerely yours,
:)Ash
Author: What is a Crowmaker?
Dear Author,
Thanks for your submission, but it isn't right for me. Best of luck,
Bane
(reasoning: nothing wrong with this one in the least, but it just didn't spark my interest)
Dear Author:
Please send me your full manuscript.
Regards,
PC
Okay that is my fifth. The one's I chose were: 1, 10, 17, 46, 50
Dear Author,
Thank you very much for your query. I am sorry to inform you that I don't think this is going to be a good fit for me.
I do believe your work has promise and think that you will find a good home with another agent.
Best of luck to you,
Karen
Dear Author,
I'm intrigued enough to give this one a go. Please send your full manuscript ASAP.
Best regards,
Ai Hua
Dear Author:
Thank you for your query and I apologize for this form reply.
I regret I have to pass on many interesting projects due to time constraints. I wish you the best of luck in securing representation elsewhere.
Sincerely,
DeadlyAccurate
form rejection
aw I actually want to read this but I have to be very picky because only two requests left.
Here's why this query doesn't work for me. You don;t give enough details. Why was the protagonist's exiistence bleak? and why was she chosen? more specific details about the conflict would have too.
So:
Dear author,
I'm afraid I'm not the right agent to represent your manuscript. Thanks for querying.
Sincerely,
Moniza
Dear Author,
Thank you for your recent submission. While our agency is not the best fit for this particular project, other agents may feel differently. I wish you luck in your search for representation.
Regards,
Bookshop
Dear Author:
Thanks, but no thanks.
-Agent
Thank you for your query. I'm afraid I will not be able to offer representation as I do not represent fantasy
I wish you the best of luck,
KC in SF
Dear Author,
Thank you for considering My Agency for your next project. Unfortunately, your manuscript does not fit within my needs at this time.
Thank you,
Agent For a Day.
Thank you for your submission. After much deliberation, I have decided to pass on your project, The Crowmaker. While the premise seems interesting, your writing is a little unclear and disjointed for me.
Best of luck,
Katy
Dear Author,
Thanks for your submission. After careful consideration, I've decided this manuscript isn't for us at this time.
Good luck with your search.
Best,
Agent For a Day
Dear Crowmaker,
Thank you for your query, and thanks for reading my blog. Unfortunately, I don't feel that this story a right fit for me.
Best of luck,
Renee
Dear Author,
Thank you for your interest in my agency. However, I will not be requesting any further materials from you at this time. Please note that submissions are a very subjective business and my comments are not a critique on your writing ability. I strongly encourage you to continue your search for an agent and wish you all the best.
Your sincerely,
Make-believe Agency
Thanks for the opportunity but I'm afraid I'll have to pass on representing this piece.
Best of luck with your writing.
~Eden
Sorry, but form rejection.
I am curious about what a crowmaker is and would like that defined to get a sense of your world. I would also want a better sense of characters and what is at stake.
Dear Author,
thanks for your interest but unfortunately I am going to pass this time.
Sincerely,
David de Beer
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Your proposal is interesting, but I don't feel that the project is quite right for me. I wish you the best of luck in finding representation elsewhere.
Best,
Cat.
Dear Author of Query #50,
Thanks for your query. I liked your storyline for CROWMAKER and would like to see the writing. Please send me a synopsis and the first three chapters.
KathyF
It sounds like it might be interesting, but I still have no idea what a Crowmaker is. What do they fight against? What are their weapons and why do they fail?
I'm sorry, but this isn't right for me. Thank you for submitting and good luck.
Thank you for your query. I am not interested in further materials on this work. Good luck with your search for representation. CJK
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query, but unfortunately this project isn't right for me. Best of luck in your search for representation.
Sincerely,
Melinda
Dear Crowmaker,
I didn't get a good enough sense of the novel from your query, and I'm afraid I'm going to have to pass.
Thanks,
Sage
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. I regret to inform you that I am not the right agent for your work.
Your query letter, though interesting, is a bit jumbled and hard to follow. You might consider revising it for future submissions.
Best wishes and keep writing!
Sincerely,
Agent
Thank you for sending me your query. Unfortunately, this project is not right for me. I wish you the best of luck in securing representation
Dear Author,
Thank you for submitting your manuscript, but I don't think I'm the right agent for it. Best of luck.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. While aspects of this story are intriguing, this story is not right for me at this time. Best of luck to you in your continued efforts. Please keep in mind that other agents are different.
-- If I had another request left, this probably would have made the list.
Form rejection.
Tally
I'd look at pages.
Reason: I can see hints of an interesting plot.
Dear Author,
Thank you for contacting Selene Literary. After careful consideration, we regret to inform you that this project is not right for us. We wish you the best of luck in finding an agent that is as enthusiastic about this book as it deserves.
Best regards,
Selene Da Agent
Selene Literary
Dear Author
Regrets.
Good luck with your writing.
Regards,
Dear Author
Thank you for your query.
I found aspects of your story very intriguing, however I am not convinced that it is the right project for me.
I’m sure your project will find a home somewhere.
Best of luck to you
-Nay
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. I sincerely appreciate the opportunity to review your proposal, and found the premise for your manuscript intriguing. However, I’m afraid that the manuscript does not meet my needs at this time. Please do continue to send your work to other agents, as someone else may feel differently.
Best of luck in your publishing endeavors,
Jeni
Dear Author:
I'm very sorry, but I don't think I'm the right agent for your project.
Notes: Although I found the concept intriguing, the structure of the hook made it difficult to understand, and I was concerned the entire book would have the same feel.
For example, the first sentence is really two sentences and two different concepts (who the protag is and how he got to be what he is) but you've inserted one idea inside the other and therefore made both difficult to puzzle out.
It's very possibly an excellent book, but with so many good queries today, it can't make my top 5 for the game.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately this is a genre which I don't typically represent.
I wish you the best in your search for an agent.
Kind regards,
Sol Nima
Dear Author,
There were interesting points in your submission, but I’m afraid I can’t offer representation. This is a subjective business, and what appeals to one reader doesn’t always appeal to another. With my current workload, I have to be very discriminating and take on only projects I am passionate about.
I urge you to continue your quest to be published and wish you the best of luck.
Sincerely,
J.M. Agent
Dear Author
Thank you for sending me your query. I regret to inform you that it does not suit the needs of my list at this time.
Regards, Jessumby
The query reads formulaic, but I'm still intrigued by the premise. I'd request a partial.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. I'm afraid I am not the right agent to represent your story.
Sincerely,
Amy
I'd be interested in reading your book. Please send me the full manuscript as a Word attachment.
Best,
Agent for a Day
o
Dear Author,
While it seems like an interesting premise for a book, I'm sorry to say that I cannot take on the project. Thank you for considering me, and best of luck in the future.
Sincerely,
Thin
Dear Crowmaker,
Thank you for your submission, but unfortunately it’s not for me. Publishing is a very subjective business, though, and another agent may feel differently. Best of luck in your continued search.
After she discovers the engineer is dead, the query gets confusing. And the theme is a bit cliche--work with it to make it stand out more.
Yours,
Kat Brauer
Dear Author:
Thank you very much for your query. Unfortunately, I won’t be able to consider your work for representation. As you know, it’s a competitive market these days, and I don’t believe I have the right relationships to sell this project successfully. I do wish you luck in finding an agent and thank you for considering me.
Yours truly,
RW
Thank you for submitting, but unfortunately I didn’t connect with this story idea.
Good Luck,
Keri
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It just didn't grab me.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. As your story didn't resonate with me, I'm going to have to pass.
--
Polenth
Dear Author --
I am intrigued by your idea. Please email the full manuscript to me.
Thank you.
S. Bleu
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. I am afraid that your work is not right for me at this time, however I would urge you to continue to submit to other agents: this is a subjective business.
Agent
Thank you for your submission but it doesn't seem right for me at this time.
Good luck in the future.
Dear Author,
Thank you for submitting your query to Moth's Literary Agency. While your story sounds interesting, I'm afraid it's just not right for us. Best of luck in your writing career.
Sincerely,
Moth
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. I was intrigued by your query however at this time my client list is full.
I wish you luck on your writing journey.
Sincerely,
KDrausin (Thumbs up!)
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query letter.
Your premise is interesting.
Please email me the first 3 chapters of your novel.
Thanks,
-Lesley
Thank you for your query, but I wouldn't be the right agent in this instance.
I wish you luck finding the right home for your work.
Sincerely,
Ms Agent Agency
Dear Author:
Thanks for querying me with THE CROWMAKER. Unfortunately this project is not right for me. Best wishes in your search for representation.
Regards,
Thanks for submitting your query. Unfortunately, I don't feel I am the agent to represent this work.
Dear Crowmaker:
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately your book is not right for me. Another agent may feel differently. Best of luck,
Lisa R
Dear Author,
I enjoyed reading your query. Please send the first three chapters of your novel to the address below.
Sincerely,
Agent
Thank you for your query. I am interested in seeing some of your manuscript. Please email me the first 30-40 pages.
I'll pass on this one.
Agent
(ps - if I could have chosen ten instead of five, yours would have been one of them. BUT, I'd get rid of that first graph and start with the story. Also, expand on the details a bit (if you can give a sentence about the word Crowmaker, that might show some voice. What is the Crowmaker's greatest weapon? Flawed plans and rushed experiments to what end? You say "Kellen finds a dead man, a town under siege", but I thought she was already in that town? Clarify. Most important, WHAT IS HER PERSONAL PLIGHT? It sounds like an amazing story, but I don't know enough yet about kellen to make me care. Make me care and you've got a request.)
Dear Author,
Thank you for thnkig of me, but I'm going to have to pass. Best of luck finding another agent!
Sincerely, Agent Faux
Dear Author,
Thanks for giving me the chance to consider your work. Unfortunately, it's not something I think I can sell at present. I wish you the best of luck in your writing career.
I considered this one down to the final ten or so. Sorry, but I have to pass.
Dear Crowmaker,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately I do not think I am the right person for this book. I wish you success in your search for representation.
Best,
Dara
Specifics: Excellent query, I just wasn't hooked enough with the story. It could just be personal taste here.
Dear Author,
Thanks for your query but I'm afraid this will be a pass for me.
While I get a sense of some steampunk elements here, which might be interesting, they're fairly vague and you'd really need to flesh them out here to distinguish how different your story is from other fantasy novels. The central conflict at stake is also not really compelling for me, so you may need to work on this.
I wish you the best in your search for an agent.
Regards,
Soratian
Form rejection.
I still have one acceptance left and this is tempting, but so were several others. Have to pass.
Dear Author,
Your novel and query are both: well written, formatted and well thought out. If you are interested, I would like to have a partial of your manuscript to read, revise, and consider taking on as a full-fledged project.
Best wishes,
JuJu
(Ha! I knew I was saving my last free slot for a good reason!)
Dear Author,
Though your project shows some promise and sounds interesting, unfortunately it is just not the right one for me. Please keep in mind that appeal as a novel is entirely subjective – so keep at it!
Sincerely,
JuJu
Oh my God, so sorry - previous message was for query #49!
I would not make a good agent.
Dear Author
Thank you for giving me the chance to read sample materials from CROWMAKER. While I liked your concept and voice, I'm afraid I didn't find quite enough energy in the pacing. For that reason, I'll have to pass, but I wish you all success with this project.
Dear Author
Thanks for querying us. I regret I have to pass on this one, but wish you every success in finding representation.
Cordially Yours,
Agent
Dear Author: Thank you for your query regarding Crowmaker. While the concept shows promise, the work is not right for my agency. Best wishes. Savannah Pens Agent
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately I do not believe I am the best person to represent your work.
Your query sounded interesting, but I couldn't quite follow the plot. What exactly is a crowmaker, and what are the character's motivations? Would love to get more details on the character and the world.
Dear Author:
I want to thank you very much for giving me the opportunity to consider your work. Unfortunately, I did not connect well enough with your project to pursue it further. As I'm sure you know, agenting is a very subjective business. Although your project didn't fit with my particular list, another agent may respond very differently.
Please accept my best wishes for success in your writing career and finding the perfect advocate for your work.
Sincerely,
Tree
Not currently representing this genre. Best of luck to you.
Alicia
Thank you for the opportunity to look at you work. Unfortunately, I don't feel this is the right project for me.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. After careful consideration, I regret to inform you that I have decided to decline representing you for this manuscript.
I think you have a very compelling story line and you made it to the second round in my consideration. The only reason I am declining is the mandatory limit of only accepting five manuscripts.
Best of luck to you! I'm sure you will find representation soon.
Laurie
Dear Author of Crowmaker,
Although your work shows merit, I cannot request further materials at this time. Keep in mind that this business is terribly subjective, and you'll probably get the chance to thumb your nose at me in the future.
Love,
Sophie
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query, your project doesn't meet my needs at this time.
Best of luck to you in your writing career.
~Venus Vaughn
Form rejection--too much going on in the query, not enough sense of personality or actual story.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. After careful consideration, I regret that I’m unable to request your manuscript at this time.
Best,
Agent for a day
Dear Author,
Thanks for the chance to look at your work. Unfortunately, I don’t think I’m the right agent for this project.
Best of luck,
Lizzie
Not for me.
I'm sorry, this one isn't for me,
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query.
Unfortunately your storyline does not seem to have that little extra that is needed to make it stand out among other Fantasy books.
Another agent may very well see it differently.
Kind regards,
Larry
Dear Author,
Thanks for your query. Unfortunately, Crowmaker is not the right fit for me and I will have to pass.
Best,
Agent for a Day, Kats
Dear Author,
I've reviewed your query but am afraid your project isn't a good fit with the works I represent. I hope you won't let this discourage you, however, as every agent has different tastes and you're sure to find representation that will better suit your needs.
Thank you for considering me.
Amethyst Adams
Form Rejection.
Agent DC
Dear Author,
Thank you for taking the time to submit your query. Unfortunately your book is not of a genre that I am best suited to represent. However, all writing is of value and I wish you the best in your endeavours.
Best wishes
Agent for a Day
Note: I didn’t feel the story stood out enough from other similar books, sorry.
Thank you but it's not for me at this time.
Dear Author;
Form rejection.
Cordially,
Agent Gregory
[Other comments apropos. Queryshark rants about long, unbroken paragraphs. I agree. Break it up. White space! Having said that, this query is better than most. Keep writing!]
Dear Author:
Sorry, but I have to pass.
Dear Author,
I received and read your query. I'm going to pass.
Best to you,
Agent SCl
Dear Author,
I'm very curious about the "sentient force of nature." And also what the heck is a "crowmaker"?
Please send the first three chapters.
- AI
Thank you for your submission but I do not believe that it is right for me at this time. Good luck on your quest for the perfect agent.
Patti K.
Sorry, not right for me.
Marie
I think there might be some possibilities here. How good are you at introducing your world to a new reader? It's time to show me. Please send the first 50 pages and a 6 page synopsis.
Jean
Dear Author,
CROWMAKER intrigues me and I would like to see more. Please send along the manuscript.
Thanks!
Barbara
Thanks for your submission. At the present time, it doesn't fit our list. I wish you the best with another agent who might be a better fit.
Elaine
Reject
Thanks for thinking of us, but at this time I don't think I could sell it.
Sincerely,
me
Dear Crowmaker: I'd like very much to read the first fifty pages of your novel. Please send them to me along with a copy of your query letter and a SASE with sufficient postage if you'd like your work returned. Regards, L.C.
Thanks for your query. I'm going to have to pass.
Thanks for your query, but I'm afraid this isn't right for me.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. However, your work does not fit our needs at this time. Best of luck.
Dear Author,
Thank you for querying "Agent for a Day" Agency. Unfortunately, we do not feel this story is a good fit for our list at this time. We encourage you to continue querying other agents.
Best of luck,
Raven56
Dear Author.
Thank you for your query, at this time we are not representing this genre. We wish you the best of luck placing it with another agency.
Sincerely,
Agent
Note: Two reasons: I saw some awkward phrasing in the query and there was nothing that made this jump out at me as something different than anything on the shelf. I've got to sell this to an editor! How can I convince them this is different than every other YA fantasy?
Crowmaker.
Sorry, not for me.
Best of luck,
Sheryl
Dear Author,
Thank you for the opportunity to consider your manuscript. I'm afraid it isn't right for me.
Regards,
-Annalee
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Reason: Didn't grab me. Another that feels vague in the wrong places. Details aren't enough--they must be significant details.
whew, that's all the flat form rejections--now back to my maybe pile.
Dear Author:
Thank you for allowing us to consider your work. I’m sorry to say that this is not something we are interested in at this time. We receive hundreds of submissions every week and, unfortunately, cannot take them all on. This is a very subjective business and I wish you luck on your journey to publication.
Sincerely,
Horserider Literary Agency
Dear Author,
Thank you for query. I'm afraid that this piece isn't right for me and I will have to pass at this time.
Yours,
Audrey
(My requests for the day were #'s 9, 17, 19, 36, and 48.)
Dear Author,
Thank you for thinking of me as a possible representative for your novel.
While your query held my interest, I’m sorry to say I’m not enthusiastic enough about the novel’s premise to request additional materials.
Best of luck in finding the right home for your novel.
Agent Du Jour
Thank you for considering me. Unfortunately, this piece isn’t right for me at this time. Good luck with this and future endeavors.
TF
Form Rejection...
Dear author,
Thank you for taking the time to submit a query. Unfortunately, I am unable to offer representation at this time.
Thank you,
Nicole
Thank you for sending this original proposal. We regret that it doesn't suit our needs at the moment. Best of luck to you.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission, but this story is not for me at this time. Best of luck with your future endeavors,
Taymalin
Dear Author of CROWMAKER:
Thanks for your query. It is our top priority to select what best matches our agency. We wish you success as you pursue an agent better suited to your work.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. THE CROWMAKER sounds intriguing. Please send me the first three chapters.
Sincerely,
Rachel
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. I read it but unfortunately have to pass on it.
I wish you the best of luck in finding representation.
Regards,
SGF
Dear Author,
Thanks for letting me consider your project. Unfortunately, it is not quite right for my list. I must therefore step aside and encourage you to submit elsewhere.
Best,
Agent
PS - The set-up worked for me, but by the end there was a lot of stage business, but no sense of how the conflict might play out.
Thank you for querying our agency. Unfortunately your project is not what we’re looking to represent at this time. Best of luck.
- Jeannie
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