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Dear Agent for a Day
For over ten thousand years it ceased to exist; genetically engineered into extinction. Every record of its existence buried deep and forgotten within Corporate secure databases. Possession of this knowledge is illegal and the consequences extreme. Kutch only recently acquired this knowledge while intruding Corporate databases with the help of his internal AI, Li. The ancient data is so unbelievable that he filed it away as nonsense; at first. But now while on the job as Coroner, Free Radicals Division for Corporate, he is staring at what can only be described within the context of that illicit knowledge; murder! A monster has returned.
Reporting the death as anything other than normal to Corporate Security would only incriminate himself and his AI to their own illegitimate activities. The burden of knowing the truth consumes his every waking thought and invades every dream-state. There is no escaping it; something must be done, but what? DESCENDANTS is a 100,000 word adult science fiction story of murder, suspense, and intrigue spanning the galaxy.
Kutch is not a typical science fiction-fantasy monster slayer relying on training and experience to take on the unknown. There are no Corporate Protocols on how to handle a situation as this. He decides to confide his dilemma to Alex, a recent acquaintance that lives outside of Corporate protocols and scrutiny. She is smart, bold, confident and skilled in the art of deception, particularly when it comes to hiding from Corporate Security. Most important, she doesn’t think Kutch has gone insane!
Kutch is convinced there is only one thing left to do and with Alex’s help they embark on a search for a monster that should not exist. Eluding Corporate Security becomes the least of their worries when they discover the very thing they are seeking to stop from killing again, will stop at nothing to kill them next!
The completed or partial manuscript will be sent upon request.
Thank you for your time,
Author
STATS: 2% request rate
This is a good query and I encourage you to submit it to other agents until you are accepted.
Dear Author,
Thank you for sending me your query. I gave it careful consideration, but ultimately I concluded I’m not the right agent for the book.
Good luck with your manuscript, and query widely!
Thanks,
SDC
Dear Author,
Thank you very much for your query. While I appreciate the time and effort you’ve put into your work, I don’t believe this is a good fit for me.
Please remember that what doesn’t fit one agent may well fit another! I encourage you to not give up. In the future, if you have other manuscripts to query, I hope that you’ll think of me again.
Sincerely,
Agent Gryph
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. I’m afraid I’m not the right agent to represent you, but I wish you the best of luck.
Kate H
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, it is not the right fit for me.
Best,
Reba
(Note: I found the query overly complicated. A little tightening could go a long way. Good luck!)
Dear Author,
I received and read your query. Unfortunately it is not something that I’m looking for at the moment.
Keep me informed about your future work and good luck!
Agent S.K.
Dear Author,
I regret to inform you that I am not interested in representing your story. I hope you have better luck in the future.
Best of luck,
Arkham
Hi,
Thank you for your submission, unfortunately, your voice wasn’t right for me. Best of luck.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. Unfortunately, your manuscript isn’t right for me. Best wishes in your search for an agent.
Sincerely,
Agent for a Day
Dear Author,
Thank you for submitting your query to My Imaginary Yet Successful Literary Agency. I receive many queries each day, and I request only a small percentage of manuscripts that I’m interested in representing. I have decided not to request one for your book because I don’t feel that I’m intrigued enough to be its best representative.
Should you need resources for querying, finding writing resources and groups, or if you’d like to know more about how I choose manuscripts, please visit (this section of my agency’s website) for more information. I wish you the best of luck in finding a home for your writing. Thank you again for giving me the opportunity to consider your work.
Warm regards,
Hallie
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And if I were fortunate enough to be able to give some feedback to each and every author I declined, I’d note the following:
I love science fiction, and this query, for me, just turned out to be a little too-long and not tightly written enough to make the cut. Best wishes!
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I don’t feel this is right for me. Good luck with your search.
Best,
S
Dear Author
Thank you for your interest in our agency and submitting your query for your novel Descendants.
I read it with interest but unfortunately it is not what I am looking for.
Best of luck and kind regards.
Yours faithfully
Robert Sullivan AFAD
Dear Author:
Thank you for your submission. Unfortunately, I don’t think I am the right agent for this novel. Best of luck in your search!
Agent Nikki
Form rejection:
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately it doesn’t meet my needs at this time.
Thank you and best of luck,
Melissa (Ximera)
Sorry, but I’m going to have to pass. Don’t give up though!
Thank you for your submission. I regret that I don’t feel this project isn’t right for me.
I wish you the best in your writing endeavors.
Dear Author,
Thank you for submitting your query. Concidering my current workload, I can only take on projects I feel truly passionate about. While the concept shows promise, I didn’t find myself truly drawn to the idea. I have to pass. Good luck in your writing.
Kendra
Thank you for submitting however [If I were a real agent, a GENTLE FORM REJECTION would exist here].
Thank you for submitting to my agency, however I’m going to take a pass at this time.
Vic K
Reason; There’s a really interesting premise in here and I must admit I hesitated here for a long while… in the end I wasn’t quite as grabbed by it as I needed to be.
Dear Author,
Thank you for considering me. Unfortunately I have to pass. Reason for rejection – personal taste.
Best of Luck!
Agent X-9
Dear Author,
Thank you for the opportunity to represent your work. Unfortunately, it isn’t a good fit for me. Since you deserve an agent who will fully support you project, I will have to pass.
I wish you the best of luck in finding representation.
Sincerely,
Agent-for-a-day Sara
Dear Author,
Thank you very much for taking the time to query our agency. I have given your project thoughtful consideration; unfortunately, it is not a good fit for us at this time because I already have something similar on my list, and want to avoid a conflict of interest.
Sincerely,
Heather
Thank you for submitting your book – Descendants – for my consideration. May I say that I enjoyed reading your query. Regrettably, I do not feel that I am able to represent this particular book – a fact that has more to do with pressures on the time and resources at my disposal rather than on the book itself. Best wishes for your future endeavours, both with this book and with future projects. Agent Rik.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. However, currently, I am sorry to say I must turn down your manuscript. Good luck with other submission endeavors.
Sincerely,
Lit Agent
Dear Author, Thank you for your submission, but I’m afraid we will not be able add you our author list at this time.
Best wishes,
Jackie
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. I’m afraid I have to pass at this time.
Good luck with your writing.
Sincerely,
Agent for a Day
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission, but I’m afraid your story isn’t right for me.
Although your work shows promise, it still needs considerable polishing before I would feel comfortable representing it. Feel free to requery after you’ve made revisions.
Best wishes,
L.C. Gant (Agent for a Day)
Dear Author #44,
I regret that I cannot offer representation- and that my other obligations necessitate using this form letter.
Tastes and opinions vary, so I encourage you to query widely. I wish you the best of luck as you continue to pursue publication.
Warmly,
Sarah, Literary Agent for a Day
Reasons:
I had a hard time keeping everything straight in the first paragraph. The POV change in the fourth paragraph also threw me- “Kutch isn’t typical” and then the next sentence is right back in the story. I also didn’t feel why I should pull for Kutch in this story other than not wanting Corporate to win.
Dear Author,
Thank you for giving me the opportunity to consider your work. I regret to say that I don’t feel that I’m the most appropriate agent for this project.
Best wishes,
HHS
Dear Author,
Thank you for giving me the opportunity to consider your work. I regret to say that I don’t feel that I’m the most appropriate agent for this project.
Best wishes,
HHS
Dear Author,
Thank you for contacting Dawn Ink. Unfortunately, DESCENDANTS is not what we’re looking for right now.
Best of luck in finding representation.
Sincerely,
Dawn
Dear Author:
Thank you for your query, but I’m going to have to pass. I do not feel strongly enough about your story to represent it well.
Sincerely, Guy Stewart
Dear Author,
Thank you for taking the time to submit your query to me.
At this moment in time, however, I choose to pass on your project. This does not automatically mean your query is not good enough. It simply means that I am not the right agent for this project. This can be for a number of reasons.
If you would like to know why, you can send a reply to this mail. Please change the subject line to: FEEDBACK / DESCENDANTS/ YOUR NAME. I will respond to your request within two weeks.
Good luck with finding representation and keep on writing!
Kind regards,
Nicole34
I’m sorry, but this doesn’t work for me. Good luck!
Thank you for your query.
I’m afraid I’m going to have to pass.
Sincerely,
Kathy
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query, but DESCENDANTS is not what I am looking for at this time. I could not give it the necessary attention.
Good luck with your search for representation.
Please feel free to submit future endeavors.
Sincerely,
Agent for the Day
Dear Author:
Thanks for sharing your query. Sorry I can’t represent your work. Good luck!
Anahita
Dear Author:
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I do not feel that your story is the right fit for me.
Best of luck.
Saint_Fool
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, your writing style made it very difficult for me to understand exactly what it was you were talking about, and without a real idea of what your book is about I cannot represent it. I’m afraid I have to pass.
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I will have to pass at this time.
Best of luck,
That Agent Girl
Thank you for your submission. Unfortunately, this project is not a good fit for me. I appreciate your time and consideration, and wish you luck in finding representation.
Best,
Agent M
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query letter and for thinking of me for representation of DESCENDANTS. While your novel sounds intriguing, I’m sorry to say I won’t be able to pursue it further with you. I wish you all the best in securing other representation.
Regards,
R. Markiam
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. It’s not right for me, but please keep me in mind for future submissions.
Regards,
Jenn S.
(Reason: The writing in the query isn’t precise–e.g., “intruding” instead of “hacking.” Too much description, yet not enough hard detail. What is this data, exactly? The knowledge of how to murder? The plot itself doesn’t grab me either.
I don’t believe the manuscript would be written any better than the query. I recommend revising the novel and query letter for wordiness.)
i regret that we cannot help you
Thank you for your query submission, but I’m afraid we’re not interested in your material at this time.
Best of luck,
Placebo Publications
Thank you for your submission. Unfortunately, I’m not the right agent to represent your work. I wish you the best of luck in placing it elsewhere.
Agent for a day.
Reasoning: ancient knowledge in a database is a cliche. The writing is juvenile.
Dear Author:
Thank you for submitting your query for consideration. I appreciate the time, energy, and passion that it required to complete “Descendants”.
Unfortunately, given the thousands of queries that I receive annually, I can only request a small percentage of manuscripts for possible representation. While I find the subject matter of your novel intriguing, it does not meet my editorial needs at this time.
I am grateful for the opportunity to consider your work and wish you much luck in your future endeavors.
Sincerely,
Laura Martone
Thank you for your query, but it is not a good fit for me. Best wishes.
Livia
Thank you for your query, but your project isn’t right for us at this time. Best of luck in your endeavors.