Nathan Bransford, Author


Monday, April 13, 2009

Be An Agent for a Day: Query #21

This query is part of the Be an Agent for a Day contest. Rules and Regulations here

Please post your rejection or manuscript request in the comment section!



Dear Agent for a Day,

What if you could make things happen just by imagining them? Fourteen year old Sarah Lewis has the power, but she'd do anything to get rid of it. That's because her talent is uncontrollable and unpredictable, and when it takes over, people usually end up getting hurt.

Sarah's struggle to accept her gift and the responsibility it thrusts upon her are at the center of Running Blind, a completed young adult manuscript of approximately 60,000 words.

Fearful of her secret gift, Sarah does everything possible to avoid triggering it. She learns to blend into the background, avoid attention, and minimize emotional ties, all in an effort to keep herself from lashing out psychically. But everything changes when Sarah is invited to attend exclusive Delhart Academy, an "invitation only" private school surrounded by tall gates and an air of mystery. First, she catches the eye of god-like Student Recruiter Eric Sanders. Then there’s sexy Garrett Landry, a loner with a tattoo and an attitude the size of Mount Rainier. Garrett plays on Dancia’s deepest fears when he suggests that there’s something nefarious going on at Delhart, and Eric is playing an integral part.

Eventually, Sarah will be forced to take sides in the most difficult struggle she has ever faced. Should she trust Eric, or Garrett? Must she follow the rules, or her own instincts for what is right and wrong? And perhaps most importantly, can she learn to believe in her talent, or will she always be fighting with a piece of herself?

A little about me, I am an active member of the Romance Writers of America and a former Golden Heart Finalist. I am also an attorney, mom to two fabulous kids, and very slow triathlete.

Thank you for your time. I would welcome an email or phone call if you are interested in seeing more of Running Blind. I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely,
Author

STATS: 17% request rate






330 comments:

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Chanelley said...

Thank you for submitting your query, which I read with great interest. I would like to see more of your work, so if you could attach the first thirty pages as a reply to this email, I’d appreciate it.
All the best,
Agent for the day

Josephine Damian said...

rhetorical question?

form rejection

Agent X said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your recent query. Please send the first 50 pages of RUNNING BLIND as a Word document attached to this e-mail.

Sincerely,

Agent X

Derek said...

Dear Author,

Your book sounds promising, but I've already used up 4 out of my allotted 5 manuscript request rights, so I'm having to be more selective. I'll pass on this one.

Agent For A Day.

TheDivaAgent said...

Dear Author,

We at The Divalicious Agency understand and appreciate the hard work required to craft a novel. Unfortunately, we are not accepting submissions at this time.

We wish you the best in finding representation for your novel.

Yours,

The Diva Agent

brian_ohio said...

Thank you for your query. I'm afraid this isn't right for me.

Best,

Brian

lesleylsmith said...

Dear Author,
Thank you for your query letter.
Your premise is interesting.
Please email me the first 3 chapters of your novel.
Thanks,
-Lesley

Anonymous said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. I wish you the best of success in placing your book, but it simply isn't a good fit for me.

Agent99

Reason: I'd want to see more to determine what sets this apart from similar works in this genre.

Matilda McCloud said...

Thanks for your query. I'm afraid I'll have to pass on this one.

Keep writing!

With my very best regards,

Matilda McCloud

Dorine White said...

Dear Author,

I find your work interesting and would like to read more. Please send me the first 5 chapters as a Word doc.

Best,
Author for a day

Owl Sprite said...

Dear Author,

Thank you very much for sending me your query for "Running Blind." Unfortunately, although you have a good premise and a very well-written query, it sounds too similar to other queries I have recently received.

Therefore, I'm afraid this doesn't meet my needs at this time. But if you have other projects in the future for which you are seeking representation, please do contact me.

Sincerely,

Sophie W. said...

Dear Author of Running Blind,

Although your work shows merit, I cannot request further materials at this time. Keep in mind that this business is terribly subjective, and you'll probably get the chance to thumb your nose at me in the future.

Love,

Sophie

quixotic said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query, however, I do not feel excited enough about, RUNNING BLIND to request anything further.

Good luck in your search for an agent.

Quixotic

terri said...

Thank you for your query. My first opinion, which you can take or discard as you wish, this sounds too much like a derivative of X-Men and not right for an over-saturated market.

If I'm wrong, please consider re-focusing your query to differentiate yourself from the X-Men mythology.

Sincerely: Agent

PurpleClover said...

Dear Author:

This story has promise however I don't feel this is right for me at this time. I do believe YA is a great market so please continue your luck with this query!

Regards,
PC

Reason for rejection: not enough plot info, rhetorics didn't work well, and there was no hook really. But since YA is a huge market...I would admittedly have requested a few pages. But like some of the other posters I need to save my last two requests for the rest.

Anonymous said...

gah my first post disappeared so here is my response.
I wanna read this!

Dear author,
please send me your manuscript.
sincerely,
moniza

Owl Sprite said...

(I have to say that I thought of the same thing (X-Men). This character sounds a bit like Rogue. But, I thought it was just me, since I saw the movie recently. If you gave us some juicy details to make her more unique, I might be more interested.)

Anonymous said...

Hope this is allowed;

I'd like to see this query again.
this is one I'll set aside and revisit later.

So hold on author! I may request an exclusive.(But if I do, I'll read it promptly.

Agent XXX

**this kid sounds like the Twilight Zone repeat about the boy that could wish people into the cornfield, but I know this is probably not a horror story. Sounds more like romantic/crush/infatuation

jane doherty said...

form reject.

(The rhetorical wasn't bad, but I think the MC started off with a different name and the author didn't check her "replace" well enough. Danica?)

Jeni said...

Dear Running,
Thank you for your query. I sincerely appreciate the opportunity to review your proposal, and found the premise for your manuscript intriguing. However, I’m afraid that the manuscript does not meet my needs at this time. Please do continue to send your work to other agents, as someone else may feel differently.
Best of luck in your publishing endeavors,
Jeni

Thomas said...

Dear Author:

Thank you for your submission, but your book is not appropriate for my current needs. I wish you luck in your future endeavors.

Sincerely,
Tally

Cat Hellisen said...

Dear Author

Thank you for your query.  Your proposal is interesting, but I don't feel that the project is quite right for me. I wish you the best of luck in finding representation elsewhere.

Best,
Cat.

jimnduncan said...

Thank you for querying me, but I'm afraid I must pass on your story. Best of luck in your continued writing endeavors.

(reason: I'm not big into YA, but the 'powers' in a private school setting seems a little too familiar from what I've seen on the shelves recently. The story does sound promising, however)

reader said...

Pass.

Although I have a great interest in YA, I'm not a huge fan of, nor do I represent paranormal.

sirayn said...

Dear X,

Thank you for your query. I’m afraid I have to pass, but I wish you luck in finding an agent who’s passionate about your work.

Today’s Agent

(reasoning: love the premise - teenage girl must try to not to feel anything so she doesn't cause psychic collateral damage. Unfortunately, plot seemed vague and passive. Without specific, active details, the nefarious goings-on and difficult struggles come across as generic. Every book has difficult struggles. I don't know what makes yours different.)

suki said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. I'm afraid this project isn't right for me. I wish you luck in your search for representation.

Regards,
Suki


Reasoning: I wasn't engaged by the voice or premise, and really just couldn't get past thinking, "If she can make things happen just by thinking them, then why doesn't she simply "think" the gift away?"

Harsh Critic said...

A close call for me, but I didn't think it stood out enough from other books.

Also, pointing out that one of the guys had a tattoo, as if that made him special, seemed wrong, given that many guys have tattoos these days.

Christine Rose said...

Dear Author:

Please send the first 10 pages of your manuscript pasted into an email.

Best,
Agent for a Day

ccallicotte4 said...

Dear Author, thank you for your query. I'm intrigued by your story and would like to see the first 50 pages. Please send them as an attached work document, and be sure to include "requested materials" in the subject line.

I look forward to reading your work.

Lisa R said...

Dear Running Blind:

Thank you for your query. Unfortunately the project is not right for me. I'm sure another agent will feel differently. Best of luck,

Lisa R.

Colorado Writer said...

Dear Author,

You had me at hello. Please send the first 50 pages of RUNNING BLIND as a Word document.

Best,

Agent Name

Onovello said...

Dear Author:

Many thanks for your query. Unfortunately, I am not the right agent for this work

I wish you success in finding representation for it.

Onovello

romoak said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your submission, but this is not right for me.

-- First I must say, I had issues with so much lust and romance going on with a 14 year old. The query, while the premise interested me (if the MC was older by a few years) but was disjointed. I think the second para needs combined with the others, because it seemed out of place.

Kitti said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. I regret to inform you that I am going to have to pass on this, but please keep me in mind for your future projects.

Best of luck,
Kitti

Deaf Indian Muslim Anarchist! said...

Dear Author,

Send me the first 3 chapters, please.

Best,

S

scj said...

Sorry, but this isn't right for me. I would have liked to know more specifics about the plot and what the stakes are. Best of luck.

Bija Andrew Wright said...

Thanks for your submission, but I'm afraid I'm not the right agent for this work.

Nixy Valentine said...

Dear Author:

I'm sorry, but I don't think I'm the right agent for your project.

Notes: I immediately thought "X-men" when I read this, and so that put me off. Also, I was uncomfortable with the idea of "sexy" with a 14 year old. Maybe 16, but 14 seems very young for that.

Lucy A muse ision said...

Thanks. Sorry.

Lucy A Muse ision
Fictitious Agent

Megan said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, your book isn't right for me. There seems to be similar stories on the market at the moment. Agenting is subjective, though, and I wish you the best of luck!

Sincerely,
Megan

ai-hua said...

Cute, sweet, but something's missing (what conflict)? Rejection with personal note.

Caroline said...

Dear Author:

Your work doesn't sound like something I could represent, though I appreciate your submission. Please seek other agents.

Best of luck,

Agent Caroline

Laura said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. I am interested in RUNNING BLIND and would like to request the first 30 pages.

Thank you,

Agent Laura

Anonymous said...

Not usually a genre we handle and I'm afraid it doesn't seem unique enough to change that stance. Best of luck, though.

AgentMan

jjdebenedictis said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your recent query; discovering new talent is one of the joys of being a literary agent, and I am always honoured to have the opportunity to read a writer's best work.

Please accept my regrets, however, as I won't be offering to represent this novel. I apologize for informing you of this using a form letter, but the volume of mail I receive makes it impractical for me to give personalized rejections.

I wish you the very best luck in finding a literary agent whose enthusiasm will bring your book the success it deserves!

Sincerely,
J. J. DeGoblin

~~~~~~~
For your reference, here are the most common reasons why I decline certain queries. Please note that if your submission was very good, my reasons for rejecting it were probably much subtler than the items on this list and cannot be put quickly into words. Again, I apologize for this form letter, but I cannot invest the time to critique those submissions I have chosen to not represent. Thank you for your understanding.


Most common reasons why I decline manuscripts:

[ ]--The manuscript is in a genre which I don't represent

[ ]--The query appears to be a non-personalized mass mailing

[ ]--The query/manuscript's presentation was worryingly unpolished
(E.g. Many spelling, grammar, punctuation or homophone errors; a non-standard format)

[ ]--The writing doesn't seem polished enough
(This improves with practice; your next novel may be excellent)

[ ]--The plot doesn't sound compelling enough
(Again, this improves with practice and self-education)

[ X ]--The plot sounds too similar to something book-buyers have already seen ->The Gallagher Girls series


Comments, if any:
This could be an interesting novel, but your query doesn't convince me its plot is different enough from other books out there to be marketable.

Rick Daley said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your interest in The Authors Write Literary Agency. I have reviewed your query for Running Blind, and I’m sorry to say that I do not feel that I am the best agent to represent your work at this time.

Please keep in mind that there are many talented agents out there, and opinions are subjective based on individual preferences, workload, and market climate.

Don’t be afraid to research other agents and query those that you feel are best suited to represent your work. Best of luck!

Regards,

Daley Agent for a Day

bridge said...

Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Please send a partial attatched to this email.
Sincerely,
Bridge

On personal note, I requested it because I like the premise, I like YA and I like some of the characters, I was a bit hung up by some of the wordiness. It could be tightened up a bit, a bit more sense of conflict, why does she really have to choose between two boys, what kind of problems happen because of her gift, is the school filled with people with the same gift as her, or different? Keep the tone, but maybe tighten it up a bit.

Yay! Great job.

Anonymous said...

Dear Author:

Sounds like you've managed to simultaneously rip off Harry Potter and Firestarter. Try again with an original idea.

Regards,

Mr. Snark

David de Beer said...

Dear Author,

please send me a full synopsis along with the first 3 chapters. Thank you,

David de Beer

(hmm, this one is my long-shot. Very much on the fence here but I think I would have taken a shot.)

Dara said...

Dear Running,

Thank you for your query. Unfortunately I do not think I am the right person for this book. I wish you success in your search for representation.

Best,

Dara

Specifics: Rhetorical question. Also, the premise is too similar to others I've seen; there needs to be something that makes it stand out from the others. I think there's a great deal of promise in it though since YA is a hot genre now.

Ulysses said...

Thanks for submitting your query. Unfortunately, I don't feel I am the agent to represent this work.

K. Andrew Smith said...

Dear author,

Thank you for your submission, Running Blind. Unfortunately, it's not quite right for me. I wish you good fortune in your quest for an agent.

Sincerely,

K. Andrew Smith

Megan said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I will have to pass at this time.

Best,

Meg Spencer

:)Ash said...

Dear Author:

Thank you for your interest in my agency. Unfortunately, I do not feel I am the right agent for you at this time. Best wishes as you continue your search.

Sincerely yours,

:)Ash

Karen said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. I am sorry but I will have to pass at this time. I do not believe this would be a good fit.

Best of luck to you.
Karen

John said...

Dear Author,

Thanks for giving me the chance to consider your work. Unfortunately, it's not something I think I can sell at present. I wish you the best of luck in your writing career.

beth said...

Dear Author,

Although I appreciate your submission, I'm sorry but it just isn't for me. I wish you the best of luck in your endeavors.

Sincerely,
beth

(Reasoning: I've got two slots left. This one almost got one. If I had sample pages and they were stellar, then I think I'd request this one.)

Melissa said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for sending me your query. Your project sounds promising, but I don't think I'm the right agent for the book. Best of luck.

Melissa


Thoughts: This is a great query. I've requested three already today, and I know I have to get pickier; otherwise I might have given it a shot. The rhetorical question at the beginning tipped me against.

Jenn Johansson said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I'm afraid this isn't right for me.

Best of luck!
JR

sraasch said...

Dear Author,

I think there was a name mix-up in there. (Is her name Sarah or Dancia?) Either way, the supernaturally-gifted-girl-in-a-boarding-school is a very used plot concept, and unless someone could redo it with a new spark, I don't believe it would stand up very well in the market. Sorry!

Thanks!
Sara

The Classic Carol said...

Dear Author:
Thanks for your query. It is our top priority to select what best matches our agency. We wish you success as you pursue an agent better suited to your work.

Cindy said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query, however this project is not right for me at this time.

All the best,
Cindy

Scott said...

Dear Author,

I'm having a little trouble with the looseness of your main character's "gift". If there were some more specific way she brings about a change in reality--like a specific emotion or reaction--the supporting characters might play a more active role. That said, I don't represent YA but I'm sure there will be plenty of others that will like to have a look.

Good luck,

Scott

DeadlyAccurate said...

Dear Author:

Thank you for your query and I apologize for this form reply.

I regret I have to pass on many interesting projects due to time constraints. I wish you the best of luck in securing representation elsewhere.


Sincerely,

DeadlyAccurate

Casey said...

Dear Author:

Although your query hasn't reached its fullest potential, the story itself is beckoning me to give it a chance.

Please send me the first 50 pages to casey@agentforaday.com.

Looking forward to sampling this.

-Casey

hannah said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for the opportunity to consider your work, but it's not right for me at this time. I'm afraid the premise sounds too familiar.

Best,
hannah

Cat said...

Dear Author,

I read your query with great interest but at this point I regret to say that it's not for me. Please query me again should you finish something else since I enjoyed your writing.

Sincerely,
Cat

Rick said...

Author-

Sorry, but I don't represent YA fiction.

If you have not already, you may want to check out AgentQuery. It can help you find an Agent who best suits your needs.

http://www.agentquery.com/

Sincerely,
Rick O

Craven said...

Thank you for your query. Please send me a complete manuscript.

Best regards, Craven

Bane of Anubis said...

Dear Author,

Thanks for your submission, but it isn't right for me. Best of luck,

Bane

(reasoning: I'd like a bit more details - most of the description is generic and a bit melodramatic in places. The story seems interesting and the quality of writing is good, but I need more to whet my appetite)

Lois Lavrisa said...

Dear Author,

While I appreciate your consideration of our agency, I will have to pass on your project.

I am sorry to say I did not have the passionate response to it that I would need to request more or offer you representation.

Obviously you want an agent who will stand enthusiastically behind your work.

Additionally, given today’s publishing climate I do not believe I would be able to get you the attention from a publisher that your book deserves.

Publishing is very subjective, though, and another agent may well feel differently.

I do wish you success in finding representation and, once again, thank you for the opportunity to consider your work.

Sincerely,

Lois Lavrisa
Agent for a day

Madison said...

Dear Author,

Thank you so much for submitting your work and considering me to represent it. While the story sounds quite interesting, I am afraid it does not fit my list at this point in time and I must regretfully pass. I know rejections can be hard to take, but please keep submitting and following your dream.

Best of luck in your agent hunt!

Sincerely,

Madison

Reason for rejection: Sounds interesting but the plot is not clear.

Superfast said...

Thank you so much for your submission. Unfortunately, I don't feel I'm the right agent to represent your work.

Good luck and keep writing!

The Writers Canvas said...

Thanks for your query, but it's not right for me at this time. Best of luck to you in your writing endeavors!

Elaine

RK said...

Dear Author,

Intrigued. Please send me your first three chapters!

Agent-For-The-Day

p.s. The sudden mention of Dancia threw me.

Eva Ulian said...

Rather than a full adult novel, which at 60,000 words is on the short side I would try with a YA agent, though I do feel the subject matter has been repeated fairly often.

Steve Axelrod said...

This is not for me, but i general I would suggest a more vivid decription of the crises and conflicts facing your heroine at the school. As it is, the intriguing fact of her power kind of gets lost in the shuffle.

Ethan Rose said...

It sounds like it can be an interesting book, but it didn't have anything to grab my interest.

kaseee said...

Dear Author,

Your project is not without merit, but it isn't right for us at this time. Keep in mind this is a subjective business and another agent may feel differently.

Best of luck,

Agent

dhole said...

Dear Author, thanks for your query. Unfortunately, it's not right for my list, best of luck, etc.

Hilabeans said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for giving me the opportunity to consider your work. I regret to say that I don’t feel that I’m the most appropriate agent for this project.

Best wishes,

HHS

Barb said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your submission, but this is not for me. I wish you luck in finding a home for your manuscript.

All the best,
Barb

Vicky said...

Dear author,

Thank you for querying me regarding Running Blind. While you initially hooked me with the heroine's special powers, the insufficient description of the protagonist's crisis at the school keeps me from requesting more material. I wish you all the best in your search for representation.

Tryst888 said...

Dear Author,

Your query has caught my interest and I would be delighted if you would send me a sample of the first 50 pages of your novel.

Monika said...

Thank you for your submission, but I do not think this project is right us. This is a subjective business and other agencies will feel differently. We wish you every success with your project.

Dawn G. said...

Dear Author,

At your earliest convenience, please send the first three chapters of your manuscript to my
attention.

If you do not receive a reply from me within six weeks, please feel free to contact me.

Kindest Regards,
D. Agent

Brian Crawford said...

Thank you for sending me your work. Unfortunately, I must reject it. Don’t feel bad; I receive about 2,000 queries per week, and reject 99.99% of them. Assume I’m wrong about you. Don’t give up. In the meantime, increase your chances of success by downloading my e-book, “Kick-ass Queries,” available on my website for only $199.99.

Heather said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query, but it's not for me.

Good luck!
Heather

Nik said...

Your story sounds very intriguing. Could you send me the first 50 pages?

Nik said...

I knew I had a comment, but I forgot it for a moment...

The only thing I would change about the query is to make some of the open ended questions into statements for the sake of the query.

KathyF said...

Dear Author of Query #21,

Thank you for your query, but RUNNING BLIND isn't right for me.

KathyF

SammyStewart said...

Form Rejection

Gwen said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your interest. Unfortunately, this project is not a good fit for me at the present time.

Regards,

Gwen

Don said...

[form rejection]

Cassandra said...

Dear Author,

I was most intrigued by your novel Running Blind and as such, I am pleased to offer you representation for it. Please send the completed manuscript in the form of a word document as soon as possible to my personal email [redacted] with the subject “Running Blind Request”

I look forward to receiving your manuscript and beginning our author/agent partnership.

Regards,
Cassandra

David said...

Dear Author:

Thank you for your submission, but this project doesn't sound right for me.

Sincerely,
David

Agent KES said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for submitting your query. Unfortunately, I am not able to offer you representation at this time. Best of luck,

Agent KES

Megan said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for taking the time to submit.

I would love to read more; please forward the first fifty pages via email.

Regards,
Agent for a Day, Bookworm Megs

Annalee said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for the opportunity to consider your manuscript. I'm afraid it isn't right for me.

Regards,
-Annalee

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Reason: The query gets vague at a crucial point: what is supposedly going on at the school? Why is it the most difficult challenge of her life?

On another note: Being a Golden Heart finalist is worth mentioning, but active membership in RWA doesn't tell an agent anything. I would only mention an affiliation like this if it's selective or prestigious, such as a well-known workshop.

Jen C said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for submitting your query for Running Blind to the Most Awesome Literary Agency Ever. I enjoyed reading your query and I would like to request that you send your full manuscript to me so that I can peruse your work further.

Sincerely,
Jen C.

Kavanaugh and Byrne's LA said...

Dear Author

Thank you opportunity to consider your work at Kavanaugh and Byrne’s Literary Agency.

We do not feel that are the best match with this project.
We wish you every success with this and other ventures

Flower Kavanaugh

Kelly Guentner said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for the query. I regret to inform you that this is not the right work for me to represent at this time.

I wish you luck in your future writing career.

Sincerely,
Kelly Guentner

Sasha said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I don't think I'm the best agent to represent your manuscript.

Yours truly,
AftD

Comments: Your writing is polished and articulate. However, as is, your description sounds remarkably like X Men. Perhaps you should try to emphasize more of your story's unique aspects?

EJ Lange said...

Author,

Thank you for your query. This was a close call for me, as I think your story sounds highly marketable, but in the end, I feel another agent would be better suited to your needs. Good luck in your search. I'm certain you will find representation.

Agent Erin

StrugglingToMakeIt said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for querying me. Unfortunately, I don't think I'm the right agent to represent your work.

Best,

Agent

ikmar said...

Dear Author

Thank you for your query. Sorry, but it is not for me.

Sincerely,
Agent for the Day

(Although I did hesitate on this one for a second)

Disgruntled Bear said...

Dear Author,

I would like to request the first few chapters of this manuscript. I find the story very intriguing, and I would like to read more.

Sincerely,
Disgruntled Literary Agent

Amanda Davis said...

No thank you. Best of luck in your endeavors.

-Agent Pro Tempore

Pap said...

This sounds interesting. Please send the 50 pages to me by email, as a MS Word attachment. Also, would you let me know if are querying other agents?

Olga said...

Dear Author:

I've read your query with great interest and would like to see more. Please send first three chapters as an attachment in a reply to this e-mail. Thank you for sending me your query, and I look forward to hearing from you.

Agent Olga.

Tara Ryan said...

Dear Author,
Thank you so much for submitting your work to me. Unfortunately, Running Blind is not a good fit for me at this time. I wish you much luck in your writing endeavors.
Agent-for-a-day

Craven said...
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Kristi said...

Thank you for your query. I don't feel this is right for me but I wish you the best of luck.

Sincerely,
Kristi

Endless Secrets said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for submitting your query to me for representation. I would be happy to see the first fifty pages along with a detailed synopsis of the entire work.

-Lea

Adam Heine said...

Sounds cool, but I want to know more about her powers before I'd request. What can she do, specifically? How has she hurt people in the past? Why can't she control her powers?

I'm sorry, but this doesn't sound right for me. Thank you for submitting.

Pinkie said...

Dear Author,

Your query is well written and your novel sounds like it may have promise. But you failed to distinguish it enough from similar works for me to actively seek it.

Thanks.
CPK

Jeanne Tomlin said...

Form rejection--form rhetorical question rant.

Leslie said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. "Running Blind" sounds promising but not a book that I would be able to represent. Best of luck in your writing career.

Best wishes, Leslie

Katy said...

Thank you for your submission. I don't believe this project is right for me at this time, but I wish you the best of luck in your search for representation.
Sincerely,
Katy

Melinda said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query, but unfortunately this project isn't right for me. Best of luck in your search for representation.

Sincerely,

Melinda

P.S. Who is Dancia? Need to explain or cut from query.

I'd cut this: I would welcome an email or phone call if you are interested in seeing more of Running Blind. -- It isn't necessary, and you shouldn't expect an agent to call at this point.

CJK said...

Thank you for your query. I am not interested in further materials on this work. Good luck with your search for representation. CJK

Meg Trotter said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your submission. Your story caught my interest and I would be delighted to read more. Please submit the first 30 pages.

Megan

bookshop said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your recent submission. While our agency is not the best fit for this particular project, other agents may feel differently. I wish you luck in your search for representation.


Regards,

Bookshop
________

(Hi!

This one was close for me. It ultimately lacked the focus on plot that I need a query to have, and reminded me a bit too strongly of the Gallagher Girl's series. I do wish you luck, though, because I think this has a lot of potential. :) Luck!)

Eden said...

Thanks for the opportunity but I'm afraid I'll have to pass on representing this piece.

Best of luck with your writing.

~Eden

Merry Monteleone said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your interest in The Only Literary Agency Insane Enough To Trust Me With Queries. Unfortunately, I'm going to have to pass.

Best of luck,

Merry

Renee Collins said...

Dear Running Blind,

Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I am going to have to pass.

Best of luck,

Renee

KC in SF said...

Thank you for your query, but I'm unable to offer representation at this time.

best wishes,

KC in SF

Mystery Robin said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your submission, but I am not the right agent for this book. Best of luck!

Robin

PPP said...

Dear Author,

I regret having to pass on this one due to the limitations of my already full list.

It's the secret powers--YA and MG are chock full of them, so it's hard to know if this story will really stand out.

I have no doubt someone else will snag this one and then you can laugh at my short-sightedness.

Signed,
PPP

Sage said...

Dear R.B.,

I didn't connect to the premise as much as I expected to. Another agent may feel differently.

Thanks,
Sage

MK said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query letter. Your manuscript sounds intriguing, and I'd love to take a look at it.

Please send the first 50 pages as a Word document.

I look forward to reading it.

Best,
Agent for a Day

Selene said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for contacting Selene Literary. After careful consideration, we regret to inform you that this project is not right for us. We wish you the best of luck in finding an agent that is as enthusiastic about this book as it deserves.

Best regards,
Selene Da Agent
Selene Literary

Nay said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query.
I will have to pass on this project, but best of luck to you.

-Nay

theflightytemptress said...

Dear Running Blind,

Thank you for your submission, but unfortunately it’s not for me. Publishing is a very subjective business, though, and another agent may feel differently. Best of luck on your continued search.

I like your writing, but the plot doesn't do it for me. If you have anything else finished, please query that.

Yours,

Kat Brauer

Julie Weathers said...

Dear Author,

There were interesting points in your submission, but I’m afraid I can’t offer representation. This is a subjective business, and what appeals to one reader doesn’t always appeal to another. With my current workload, I have to be very discriminating and take on only projects I am passionate about.

I urge you to continue your quest to be published and wish you the best of luck.

Sincerely,

J.M. Agent

(Rhetorical questions just set my teeth on edge, but they aren't an auto rejection. If I had more slots, I would probably request sample chapters and hope you could differentiate yourself from the X-Men academy theme. I think it has a lot of promise, you just need to set it apart from the crowd.)

austere said...

Dear Author #21

I’m afraid I have to regret.

Keep writing, and good luck with the words.

Regards,

Annie said...

I'd pass.

Reason: I feel the query just needs one more polish. The start is interesting, but you lose me by the time you start introducing other characters. The query loses focus and starts rambling.

Sol said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. Unfortunately this is a genre which I don't typically represent.

I wish you the best in your search for an agent.

Kind regards,

Sol Nima

Jessumby said...

Dear Author

Thank you for your query. Please send the first three chapters by email.

Regards, Jessumby

Amy said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your submission. I found your query fascinating; please send the first twenty pages of your manuscript.

Sincerely,
Amy

thin said...

Dear Author,
While it seems like an interesting premise for a book, I'm sorry to say that I cannot take on the project. Thank you for considering me, and best of luck in the future.
Sincerely,
Thin

This was another query that I had a hard time rejecting. Teenage love triangle with superpowers! But the query was a bit unfocused. Is some of this exposition?

RW said...

Dear Author:

Thank you very much for your query. Unfortunately, I won’t be able to consider your work for representation. As you know, it’s a competitive market these days, and I don’t believe I have the right relationships to sell this project successfully. I do wish you luck in finding an agent and thank you for considering me.

Yours truly,

RW

kdrausin said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your submission. I was intrigued by your query however at this time my client list is full. Please continue to seek representation. You are on the right track.

I wish you luck on your writing journey.

Sincerely,

KDrausin

wickerman said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. While Running Blind sounds promising, it is no right for me at this time.

Best of luck.

The Wickerman

Nathan Bransford's Cardiologist

Polenth said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your submission. As your story didn't resonate with me, I'm going to have to pass.

--
Polenth

Poppy said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your submission. I am afraid that your work is not right for me at this time, however I would urge you to continue to submit to other agents: this is a subjective business.

Agent

JuJu said...

Dear Author,

Though your project shows some promise and sounds interesting, unfortunately it is just not the right one for me. Please keep in mind that appeal as a novel is entirely subjective – so keep at it!

Sincerely,
JuJu

EMC07 said...

Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. The idea is intriguing, but I will have to pass at this time.

Sincerely,
emc

Soratian said...

Dear Author,

Thanks for your query but I'm afraid I'll have to pass on this.

Your query is well-written but I'm not seeing a strong hook linking your character's magical powers and what's happening at school. You might want to flesh this out when pitching to another agent.

Good luck!
Soratian

Sacre Bleu said...

Dear Author--

Thank you for your query. I think your idea has some potential. Please send me the first 30 pages via email.

Regards,
S. Bleu

Deniz Bevan said...

Thank you for your query, but I wouldn't be the right agent in this instance.
I wish you luck finding the right home for your work.
Sincerely,
Ms Agent Agency

Jabez said...

Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I do not believe I am the best agent to represent your manuscript. Best of luck in your quest for publication.

Dale - Las Vegas said...

Thank you for your submission but it doesn't seem right for me at this time.

Good luck in the future.

Sun Up said...

Thank you for your submission, but I do not currently handle YA.
Best of luck to you


Sincerely,
Alicia

Cat Moleski said...

Dear Author,
While your premise is interesting, I do not get enough of a sense of the plot from your query to compel me to ask for more pages. Thank you for your submission.

Cat

Sarah Laurenson said...

Form rejection.


Um, who is Dancia? She just appears in the middle of the query or maybe I read this wrong.

Kats said...

Dear Author,

Thanks for your query. I am intrigued by the premise of Running Blind and would love to read more; please submit the first three chapters to me as soon as possible.

Best,
Agent for a Day, Kats

PS This is my fourth request used and I'm not even half way through so I was really looking to reject this, but couldn't!

Sherry Ficklin said...

Dear Author,
Please send me the full manuscript at this time.
Sincerely,
Agent Faux

lucy in the sky said...

Thank you for your query. Unfortunately I do not believe I am the best person to represent your work.

Laurie said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. After careful consideration, I regret to inform you that I have decided to decline representing you for this manuscript.

I think you have a very compelling story line and you made it to the second round in my consideration, and the only reason I am declining is the mandatory limit of only accepting five manuscripts.

Best of luck to you! I'm sure you will find representation soon.

Laurie

Janeal C. Falor said...

Thank you for the opportunity to look at you work. Though this project does sound promising, I'm afraid I'm going to pass.

educlaytion said...

Another one of the few submissions I am barely passing on. I will not be surprised if I regret letting this one go. Sorry and thanks.

Belinda Frisch said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. The premise interested me enough that I am hereby requesting your completed manuscript.

Thank you,
Belinda

Tree said...

Dear Author:
I want to thank you very much for giving me the opportunity to consider your work. Unfortunately, I did not connect well enough with your project to pursue it further. As I'm sure you know, agenting is a very subjective business. Although your project didn't fit with my particular list, another agent may respond very differently.
Please accept my best wishes for success in your writing career and finding the perfect advocate for your work.
Sincerely,
Tree

Lipstick Lizzie said...

Dear Author,

Thanks for the chance to look at your work. Unfortunately, I don’t think I’m the right agent for this project.

Best of luck,
Lizzie

cwsherwoodedits said...

Thank you for your query. I'm going to have to pass.

Fawn Neun said...

Thank you for sending in your query for consideration. We have looked it over carefully, but are not sure if it meets our agency needs at this time.

Please feel free to requery with specifics and a short synopsis.


Fawn

Fairduncan said...

Dear Author

Thanks for querying us. I regret I have to pass on this one, but wish you every success in finding representation.

Cordially Yours,
Agent

Joy said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your submission and your interest in using me as an agent. After taking some time to consider your material, I have decided that this isn't right for me.

Best of luck in your writing endeavors,

Joy

Reasoning: The hook doesn't do it for me. I need something more to make it stand out.

Krista said...

Sorry, form rejection,

You may have an interesting story, but I wasn't hooked by the query.

Amethyst Greye Alexander said...

Dear Author,

I've reviewed your query but am afraid your project isn't a good fit with the works I represent. I hope you won't let this discourage you, however, as every agent has different tastes and you're sure to find representation that will better suit your needs.

Thank you for considering me.
Amethyst Adams

Anonymous said...

Your project shows promise, unfortunately it isn't right for me at this time. Good luck!

Agent DC

Horserider said...

Dear Author:

Thank you for allowing us to consider your work. I’m sorry to say that this is not something we are interested in at this time. We receive hundreds of submissions every week and, unfortunately, cannot take them all on. This is a very subjective business and I wish you luck on your journey to publication.

Sincerely,

Horserider Literary Agency

Venus Vaughn said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. I was very interested by your submission and hope you continue to pursue your writing career as you have some good ideas and an intriguing voice. Though I liked your project, ultimately it is not something I will be able to devote the right amount of energy towards.

I encourage you to hone your craft and keep submitting. Just because this isn't the right project for me, that doesn't mean you won't find representation elsewhere.

Best of luck,

~Venus Vaughn

Maryann Miller said...

So sorry, but this is not right for us. Good luck placing it elsewhere.


(Had I not used all my requests already, I would have asked for the first 50 pages of this.)

Gregory said...
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Gregory said...

Dear Author;

Form rejection.

Cordially,

Agent Gregory

[This one also made my finals list. I'd request a partial if I had room in my list. It dropped off because the theme is a common one (Twilight Zone, the Movie, Carrie, etc.). There are differences, but we also have the parallel with Harry Potter at Hogwarts. And the X-men parallels. Too many parallels. Needs a unique twist. But, aside from the awful rhetorical question, the query wasn't too bad. Could be tightened.]

Nifaerie Noven said...

Hi!

Please email me the first 5000 words.

Thanks!

Brenda said...

Dear author,
I believe this story has already been told by Isabella Carmodie.
Sorry. I will have to pass.

Savannah Pens said...

Dear Author: Please sent a full manuscript via e-mail attachment of a word compatible document. Savannah Pens Agent

KareFree Kennels said...

Running Blind


Sorry, not for me.

Best of luck,
Sheryl

Elizabeth said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your query. RUNNING BLIND sounds promising. Please send the first 100 pages plus synopsis as a Word attachment to agente@thisaintarealemailaddress.com.

Best Regards,

Agent Elizabeth

Patti K. said...

Thank you for your submission but I do not believe that it is right for me at this time. Good luck on your quest for the perfect agent.

Patti K.

Lupina said...

Thank you but it's not for me at this time.

The Lupina Agency

Barbara Webb said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for sharing RUNNING BLIND, but I am going to pass.

Best of luck!

Barbara

Lucy said...

Dear Running Blind: Thank you for offering me your manuscript, but it just does not feel right for me. I suspect you will find representation, and hope you get a great agent. One point, though: before you send your query letter out again, may I suggest that you keep your main character's name consistent? Otherwise, you need to explain how Sarah becomes Dancia. Best of luck from an agent who is likewise guilty of typographical errors! L. C.

Moth said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your submission to Moth's Literary Agency. Please email me your first 50, and include a short synopsis as well.

Thank you,
Moth

Anonymous said...

Thanks for your query, and I'm interested in seeing more of RUNNING BLIND. Please send the first fifty pages to me as a .doc attachment.

Bekkoni said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your submisson. Unofrtunately, this work is very similar to other I have seen, and therefore I must pass.

Best Wishes,
Bekkoni

Raven56 said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for querying "Agent for a Day" Agency. Unfortunately, we do not feel this story is a good fit for our list at this time. We encourage you to continue querying other agents.

Best of luck,

Raven56

SGF said...

Dear Author,
Yes. Send me the first 50 pages.

Best,
SGF

Janny said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for submitting your query about RUNNING BLIND (good title!). While some aspects of this story seem promising, other aspects of it seem a bit predictable for a YA book; additionally, at one point in the query, there seemed to have been a change of heroine's name--or at least a character who hadn't been mentioned before. That was confusing and put me off a bit.

In short, this doesn't have the "something extra" I'd be looking for from a story like this, so I am taking a pass on it. Do keep in mind that publishing is subjective, and what doesn't work for me might work for someone else. I wish you the best of luck in your writing endeavors!

Sincerely,
Janny

Maricar said...

Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. However, your work does not fit our needs at this time. Best of luck.

RB Ripley said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for thinking of me with your recent query for RUNNING BLIND.

Unfortunately, as there are currently so many YA novels that highlight young adults with magical powers, I don't believe I could adequately represent this project and must respectfully decline, though I do hope you’ll continue to consider me for future projects.

Please remember, we are part of a highly subjective industry and I am confident there is an agent out who would best represent your story.

I wish you all the best in your continued efforts. Keep writing!

Sincerely,

Agent For a Day

Audrey E said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for query. I'm afraid that this piece isn't right for me and I will have to pass at this time.

Yours,
Audrey

super agent nicole said...

Dear author,

Thank you for taking the time to submit your query. Unfortunately I will not be able to offer representation at this time.

Thank you,
Nicole

reason: i agree with everyone else who said the rhetorical questions aren't working

Anonymous said...

Dear Author,

Thank your for your interest in our agency. However, I'm afraid this isn't quite right for us. Best of luck in your future endeavors.

Sincerely,

Agent.

(The query is too vague about the story. Pages might have changed my mind.)

Carradee said...

Dear Author,

Your query strikes my fancy. Could you e-mail me a copy of your manuscript as a RTF file, please?

Carradee

***

My initial reaction was "Oh, a X spin-off. Wait--no, not quite…" A few different titles cycled through the X position.

It was the "not quite" for all those that sold me on wanting to see more. :-)

Marilyn Peake said...

Dear Author of RUNNING BLIND:

Thank you for your query. I regret to inform you that I cannot offer you representation at this time. Please do not in any way interpret this as meaning that your book doesn’t have merit or that you should give up on writing. Follow your dreams. I wish you all the best in your search for a literary agent.

Sincerely,
Writerly Angst Literary Agent

Taymalin said...

Dear Author,

Thank you for your submission, but this story is not for me at this time. Best of luck with your future endeavors,

Taymalin

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